What is your approach to problem-solving, and how does it work for you? Use specific details to support your response.
The compact and competitive day we live in, forces us to have an exact plan for our children's free times to be successful in their future. With this in mind, some people believe that student should learn a sport or playing music instrument to efficiently use their leisure times. However, I think devote time to learn some practical work experiences is more necessary than learning music or soccer. The ensuing paragraphs explain my reasons for this position.
First and foremost, gaining work experience could help youth to learn how to take responsibility for their duty and how to be organized in a working environment, whether they work for pay or working voluntarily. put it in other words, young and juvenile people usually have the support of their parents in any aspect of their life and it makes them dependent people. working in a professional environment help them if they do something wrong, accept their fault and try to make it up. Moreover, working place have some rules, for instance, they have to work for specific times, have appropriate behavior with their boss and co-workers or finishing a task in a certain deadline so, they will practice how to be organized and have a plan for their responsibility. Therefore, that is why I think gaining working experience in spare times, would be a rewarding experience for younger ones.
Secondly, young people will put their knowledge into practice and increase their chance to have a decent job in their future, if they get working experience in their leisure times. To clarify, students in ages between 14 to 18, just learned some theory lessons in schools such as biology, mathematics, physics and that sort of thing. it is crystal clear that those theoretical courses are not enough to help them acquire a decent job in their futعr. To have a well-paid job, they need to have a good resume and also have practical experience and knowledge in the field that they interested in. Thus, they should use their free time to learn some practical working experiences even they don't pay. An example can drive this notion home. When I was in high school, I worked in a company in my home town in my spare times. Although it hadn't any financial benefit for me, I learned a lot of skills which helped me to get a well-paid job after graduation from high school. that's why I believe in this way.
In conclusion, I suggest that students get a part-time job or even a voluntary task in their leisure time. that is because it not only helps them to experience an independent life and be responsible but also makes an opportunity for them to get a decent job in their future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, i think, in conclusion, sort of, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2173.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75492341357 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66285337211 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496717724289 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0362607741 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.65 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.85 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106778221085 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0354949527436 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431071239764 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0679578857882 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.054035510005 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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