When people move to another country, some of them decide to follow the costume of the new country. Other prefer to keep their own costume. Compare these two choices.
For the last two decades, people have been arguing a lot about how they should get clothing in another country. Today, most immigrants wonder whether they should keep their own country’s costume or they should follow the costume of the new country. In my opinion, following the costume of a new country would be a better idea because it would be cheaper to follow them. Moreover, keeping your costume may affect your confidence and your future in that country negatively. I will illustrate my reasons in the following paragraphs.
First, following their costumes would be much cheaper. For sure, in each country, people’s ordinary clothes are cheaper because they produced with the primary material that is available in that country. Thus, they don’t need to pay extra money for shipping them from another country. Additionally, in each country there are lots of stores that you can find their costume in there but if you want to buy another costume that belongs to another country you probably should search a lot to find a store to buy your needs. For example, in Iran, we used to wear leather jackets when the weather gets cold. Actually, Iran is one of the main producers of leather in the world; thus, it is normal that leather is cheap to hear. Last year, one of my friends who moved to a Europe country told me that when he went to a store to buy a leather jacket, he got shocked because the price was extremely high. According to the seller, having to pay a lot for the costs of importing them from Iran, they have to sell at a higher price. Therefore, he decided to buy another jacket at a reasonable price that most people in that country wear.
Second, keeping the costume of your own country would be a risk for your future success because it may negatively affect your confidence. Indeed, it is completely possible that the costume of a country seems strange for other countries' people. Thus, they may treat you in a way that hurts your self-esteem because you may think that they are humiliating you. For example, I had a classmate coming from one of the African countries. In their country, men used to wear skirts and he decided to keep his style when he moved to Iran. In fact, it was totally strange for other students to see a man in that way and they sometimes made a joke with him and did some other actions that hugely affected his self-confidence. Although he was an intelligent student, he couldn’t finish his education and decided to leave Iran. Actually, if he has decided to follow Iranian costume instead of keeping the costume of his country, he would have been finished his study successfully.
Based on the aforementioned reasons, it can be concluded that following the costume of the new country would better than keeping your own country costume.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, as to, for example, in fact, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2318.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 488.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59011124531 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450819672131 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 711.0 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1600683762 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.782608696 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2173913043 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86956521739 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285118324947 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0876687291038 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066100577098 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193470036956 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403514539503 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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