whether it should be advocated to award money to children when they get a high grade
Nowdays, patents have attached great importance to the education of children, which lays a solid foundation for their future development. A debate, however, comes over whether it should be advocated to award money to children when they get a high grade. Personally speaking, I assert that it is not beneficial to the development of children especially when the bad habit and the other better awards are taken into consideration.
Firstly, awarding money will make the children fall into a bad habit. It is commonly known that the children have a weak ability of managing money, which is due to the lack of social experience and knowledge. For example, my little brother, once he received some money from my mom, he always used it to buy some junk food or play computer games. Not only will these activity do harm to his health, but also he will fail in the next exam because he was inclined to be distracted and can't focus on his study. Therefore, managing money freely is not a good thing for the children.
Secondly, instead of money, there are some better alternative things for parents to choose. Based on that every thing should serve the development of children, the parents can offer to meet some desires of their children rather than award momey. In this way, the children still can be encouraged to pursue better grade, which never results in some bad habits.
Admittedly, awarding money can motivate the children to learn harder. Some people may also insist that it is easy to be realized for parents. However, the bad effects brought by it will make it eclipsed. What is more important is that there are some better ways to achieve the same advantages but without bad effects.
In conclusion, with the occasions I considerd above, my insistence is still that awarding money to children because of high grade is not a good way.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 358, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this activity' or 'these activities'?
Suggestion: this activity; these activities
...d or play computer games. Not only will these activity do harm to his health, but also he will...
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Line 5, column 480, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...se he was inclined to be distracted and cant focus on his study. Therefore, managing...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, for example, in conclusion, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1544.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 316.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88607594937 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56463279469 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553797468354 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5033709916 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5625 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.402651944111 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139697756751 0.076458572812 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.180232135535 0.0737576698707 244% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209511216308 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130532924573 0.0645574589148 202% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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