Without a shadow of a doubt, education plays a pivotal role in personal and social development. An unanswered question in this area is which factor is the most critical for college students’ success. However, the arguments asserting that parents and friends can boost students’ enthusiasm guaranteeing finishing university successfully, I believe otherwise, maintaining that academic achievement is closely linked to the quality of secondary schools. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint through two compelling reasons.
The first exquisite point corroborating my stance on this subject is that high schools build a foundation for students' higher education. Generally, academic institutions suppose students understand their former courses, so considerable time and energy are not allocated to review them. In this condition, if students passed their studies at a poor-quality school, they must solve their previous educational problems alone. As a consequence, they should sacrifice their spare time to follow subjects taught in their class. Insufficient recreation, along with the overwhelming workload of university assignments, will plant the seeds of frustration and disappointment. Therefore, pupils’ interest and motivation are reduced, and students consider abandoning university. One survey conducted in my university revealed that more than thirty percent of students having experienced academic dismissal attribute their failure to inferior high school classes.
Another motive to be mentioned is that those students who received misleading information from their schools are more likely to choose the wrong major that does not fit their interests and abilities. High school curriculums must include varied topics so students can evaluate their strengths and weaknesses in a wide range of fields. But some high school teachers deliberately or unintentionally neglect the importance of courses and glorify a limited range of matters like math and physics. Accordingly, many students cannot find their interests and continue the wrong path under the pressure of their families and mentors. For example, had my parents not enrolled my brother at an excellent secondary school that valued art, he would not have attained an architecture degree.
Reflecting upon the grounds mentioned above, one soon realizes that parents should select appreciate high schools for their children to flourish and succeed in their future academic life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2115.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.84254143646 4.8611393121 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04448089057 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.638121546961 0.524837075471 122% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.375652704 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.411764706 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2941176471 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23529411765 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268314637089 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0766572529466 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512524493035 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153027479608 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0200759845722 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 58.1214874552 57% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.59 10.9000537634 152% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.17 8.01818996416 127% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.247311828 166% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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