Which would you choose: a high-paying job with long hours that would give you little time with family and friends or a lower-paying job with shorter hours that would give you more time with family and friends?
Concerns about job, salary and money for every adult person is increasing in modern societies. Thus, many people prefer to spend most of their time in workplace while there are a few others who believe in spending time with family and friend more than anything else. both sides has it's advantage and disadvantages, however in my opinion, giving time to family and friends can lead us to have a better life. I have my own reasons that will show potentials in favorable style of life in my mind. I will declare some important points in the following essay.
First of all, what is the final destination of living on the earth? is it something more than being happy? the most amazing moments of the life of every individual are chiefly spent with the people they love. I will bring an example of my personal life to assert this notion. I was living more than 3 years lonely, consequently, my focus was on my business and I was in the office chronically. I didn't noticed how 3 years passed with no feelings of being happy, no fun time, no time to do my favorable actions. After all, I went to visit a psychologist, he convinced me of being depressed and adviced me to enhance my relationship with my parents and siblings. Therefore, I found myself again, I analyzed last 3 years and decided to start a new way of thinking.
Secondly, Why do we work? to gain more and more money? or to use that as an assist of being happy. how much money shall a person pay to attain just a second of his/her life? there is no doubt that money is a key element to feel happy in this century, albeit, when you consume most of your hours on making more cash! there will be no time to use that gained dollars. For instance, a rich old man who was distributing all his possessions between poor part of the society told me to work less and have fun more because death is coming and you don't know about the possible time of being in a better mood.
To sum up, in my view there are some rare moments during whole life by which you can feel happy. most of them are related to the people we attracted to. to make a strong argument of my opinion, I wrote the lines in this essay.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, after all, for instance, no doubt, first of all, in my opinion, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1753.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.33910891089 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39550127943 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549504950495 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6141615917 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.6818181818 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3636363636 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72727272727 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187844936027 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0435207135856 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049966471186 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105919446073 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0468742537165 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.89 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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