Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities?
In this day and age extreme sport is gaining popularity at an exponential rate. Many people, especially young adults, have kind of an addiction from perilous sports and activities which are usually dangerous for life and even fatal. Knowing all this, the following is bound to rise “ why are such risky activities so appealing to people”. In my opinion there are some discernible reasons which will answer this question and I will explore them in the following body paragraphs.
To commence with, I’d like to mention that extreme sport is a huge source of adrenaline. Adrenaline is a hormone, which is released in our body, when we experience some stress or extreme happiness. This, in turn, leads to new kind of feelings and emotions, which are really enjoyable for many people. In some cases, such type of people can not even live without these extreme feelings and constantly strike for new activities and adventures, which will provide them with more amount of adrenaline. In other words, if people once experience some kind of unusual and life-threatening activity, majority of them acquires strong addiction to that new feeling. Though such activities are usually rather hazardous and not advisable, we all know the saying which states “the forbidden fruit is always the sweatest”.
In addition, dangerous activities make people feel the freedom and become more confident. Let us take my own experience to exemplify this. Back in the day, when I was on holiday, I decided to fly with a parachute. This was actually the most risky decision I had ever made previously. To be honest I was scared to death at the moment the parachute took off. However, gradually I began to feel that I was free like a bird and could see the whole landscape from the sky. Then I closed my eyes and imagined myself running and whirling in the air. The long story short, after this experience I ceased to fear anything and became more confident.
To wrap up, in the light of the reasons mentioned above, we can assume that dangerous sports will remain the main favourite activities of many people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, however, if, really, so, then, in addition, kind of, in my opinion, in other words, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1769.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98309859155 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7326644269 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566197183099 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4445494121 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1052631579 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6842105263 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63157894737 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187617555399 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0521290189219 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617114912546 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121879720939 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0423169023516 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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