Widespread use of the Internet
Most people agree that the Internet affects society in many different ways. In my opinion, the most prominent effect of the Internet is that it has strengthened democracy. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, online investigative reporting plays a major role in exposing political corruption and in keeping politicians honest. In the past, there were only a limited number of news outlets and they often had deep connections to powerful politicians and were hesitant to criticize them. These days, however, there are many independent publications on the Internet that are willing to expose political misbehavior. For example, an online magazine recently published a story revealing that the mayor of my hometown had taken bribes from a property developer. The report was so detailed and well-researched that the mayor had no choice but to resign. Although the evidence was not hard to locate, only this independent website was willing to write about it. This example demonstrates how the Internet helps to strengthen democracy in the modern world.
Secondly, the free exchange of ideas found online motivates people to become politically active. In countries all over the world, people use social networking services to share their ideas and opinions. While in the past people might have thought that they were alone in their beliefs, they can now realize that others share their ideas. My own experience demonstrates this concept. When I was a university student, I learned that a municipal park near my residence was going to be demolished to make room for a parking lot. This bothered me a lot because I enjoyed spending time in the park. At first I thought that there was nothing that I, as an individual, could do to stop this from happening. However, I later joined a Facebook group dedicated to opposing the plan. When the members of the group learned how many people in the city loved the park we were happy to get together and enthusiastically protest in front of city hall until our voices were heard. I think that finding each other on that Facebook group gave us the courage to actively protect our park.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that the Internet has strengthened democracy in modern society. This is because online investigative journalism plays a big part in keeping politicians honest, and because social networking sites encourage people to be politically active.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 56, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ee that the Internet affects society in many different ways. In my opinion, the most prominen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, while, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2053.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08168316832 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82313129986 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561881188119 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 656.1 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.319702787 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3181818182 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3636363636 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.81818181818 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0874726361838 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0289033635557 0.076458572812 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0474605834528 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0632901675611 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341815630788 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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