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jobs play an important role in people's life. The social class that we are living in highly depends on our jobs. Although many people say that children must enter the job which is different from their parents, I subscribe to the opposite view. I think in this way due to two reasons. In the following, I will explain these reasons.
First, if children find a job like their parents, they can use their experiences. In today's world, experience has a dominant role in the success of people, and we cannot find someone inexperienced who could be prosperous. In fact, people who have good knowledge about a subject can prevent making mistakes. As a result, they will get success promptly. children can find these experiences themselves or acquiring that by helping their parents or other guidance. For instance, my father works in the real state market, and when I want to choose my university major, he asked me to opt for a civil engineer. after one year, I started working as a part-time job with my father. when I have got my bachelor's degree, I was so experienced in this field, and I could quickly work for myself and be an entrepreneur in this field.
Second, children can use their parents' connections to use for their purposes. if someone wants to be successful, they must have deep connections in different governmental places. The persons who are well-experienced after a long time could make some connections in these places, and they can do their jobs without interruptions. children can use this web that their parents prepared. we can see many situations that work like this. For example, distribution companies have a large number of sellers who know which customer needs their product. Furthermore, there are some jobs in which they make these connections and help the other people to facilitate their works like lobbyists, which, in fact, work as journalists, but with their relationships, they make lobby.
In conclusion, I believe that children must choose a job like their parents. this is because it can help them to use their parents' experience and because they can use their parents' connections which make after a long time work in that field.
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- wqs 3
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 71
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, well, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1828.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96739130435 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78473084838 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.2725524472 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0909090909 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7272727273 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36363636364 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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