Write a statement to agree or disagree. People spend more time on personal enjoyment rather than on what they should do
Life is too short to spend time on unnecessarily things, this short period should rather be spent on meaningful and impactful stuffs. I agree with the notion that people would spend all their time being involved in chivalrous activities rather than on useful and imperative thing. I feel this way for two reasons, which I would explore in the following essay.
To begin with, the absence of supervision some times has made people more relaxed, most especially at the work place. Employees tend to be preoccupied with personal stuffs, or prefer to having a gist with their colleagues, rather than putting more efforts in getting better at their job and ensuring efficacy and productivity. For instance, once, I was at a bank to lodge a complaint about a wrongful transaction made in my account. I was told to wait for the customer care specialist which I did, however, time after time, this lady refused to come attend to me or even any of the other complainers awaiting her arrival. It was after I flared up and demanded to see the manager because I was being delayed for so long, that this particular staff came out. When the managing director came and requested an explanation as to what she was doing out of her position for so long, to my greatest surprise, she said and I quote, "my fiancé who lives outside the country requested to have a video call with me," video calls while at work and not on break, really? This scenario has made me realize how people tend to be so loating and lethargic with their duties.
Furthermore, this information-age where technology increase is so overwhelming, has distracted lot of people, particularly students. My particular experience is a compelling illustration of this, most of us easily get carried away by posts on social media rather than on what the professor is lecturing. Once, we had this strict prof. and she noticed most of us with our phones and the subtle giggles some were making, she literally left us to do what we were so engrossed in. After the class, she told us to tear a sheet of paper for a test, our countenance betrayed the shocking reality we experience. At the end of the test, most of us failed, because we didn't pay much attention to her lectures. Based on this experience, I can confidently concur that most people would pick pleasure over being focused especially when engaging in a boring or soporific act.
In conclusion, I strongly opine that quite some persons have centered more of their time to personal enjoyment rather than on things that require urgency. This is because, the lack of supervision and the increase in technology has served as a means to distract people from focusing on what is pertinent and imperative.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 187, Rule ID: PREFER_TO_VBG[1]
Message: Did you mean 'have'?
Suggestion: have
...pied with personal stuffs, or prefer to having a gist with their colleagues, rather th...
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Line 2, column 600, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... me or even any of the other complainers awaiting her arrival. It was after I fla...
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Line 2, column 1009, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...y requested to have a video call with me,' video calls while at work and not on b...
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Line 3, column 304, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...han on what the professor is lecturing. Once, we had this strict prof. and she notic...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...cturing. Once, we had this strict prof. and she noticed most of us with our phones ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...the test, most of us failed, because we didnt pay much attention to her lectures. Bas...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, really, so, while, as to, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2246.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78891257996 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73783120293 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547974413646 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 702.9 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0668872408 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.210526316 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6842105263 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36842105263 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202957408769 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0614902972498 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718919331007 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150760058145 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0722102528916 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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