Mass media and the internet have caused people’s attention spans to get shorter. However, the overall effect has been positive: while people are less able to focus on one thing, they more than make up for it with an enhanced ability to sort through large quantities of information and find what’s important.
The rate of advancement in technology definitely comes with it's pros and cons. Basically life is intended to function that way, every situations, decisions, as well as scientific researches would have its advantages and diasdvantages. The prompt suggests that mass media and internet has reduced people listening span, and it further says; although the effect has been positive because people are able to compensate that by sorting through plethora information to find what's important. I mostly agree with this stance, although, the author fails to take note of some certain circumstances where listening skills is more needed and beneficial to sorting out informtion, and i would explain my opinion on this giving three reasons.
Firstly, It's true that the high dependent on the intenet and medias have currently taken a lot if not everyone time,everyone get busy with their phones most time either surfing through Instagram, Twitter, while some do use it for information purpose to check on trendy news and get more aware of what's going on around them. For instance, a professor could be with his laptop and phones trying to check through research areas he could explore, perhaps he could be checking through literature reviews to keep up on what others has done in his related field. In such situation, he's trying to come up with a scientific research for the advancement of the "world" because a change in a particular nation could influence changes in other countries. For someone like this prof. he might not have the luxury of time to hang out with friends and listen to them talk due to him concentrating more on research work, but he's investing more of that time to search for change. In this case we could say that indeed media is helpful in helping bring about change, although the friends he has neglected won't feel the same.
Furthermore, taking a case study from those who have had positive impacts in the world. People that have brought about change in the technology space, most of these men sacrifice their time to come up with an intiative, and the end if their investment yields they become rich and also provide employment opportunities for people. Taking an instance from the CEO of Meta, he must have neglected and failed to give attention to some of his close friends so as to achieve a greater pursuits. For someone like him, it's more profitable and adviseable for him to spend more time surfing through statistics of his company growth, how well his competitors are doing, and also other strategies to improve his own company. All of these could have taken up all his mind that he might not have the time for a long chit-chat with friends and family. This doesn't only apply to the big men in the world, even the employees would rather spend more time learning skills that would make them earn a promotion. Basically, competitions is everywhere and in all sectors, so its more imperative for people to spend time building on themselves as a person and also on their profile business wise.
However, not having or spending quality time could have detrimental effect to the person you precluding. In other words, the person one is neglecting due to one "busyness" might be in dire need of a listening ear. This is one of the major reason for the high sucide cases currently. Everone claim to be busy improving theior lives,that they neglect those that truly needs them. A case study can be drafted from a sucide case that trended on twitter last week. He died because no one care to listen to what he has in his mind. Truly, depression kills, not being able to have someone to communicate to can honestly lead one to the hand of sucide. Also, employers need to take note of their employees growth, how they are doing and what they can do to improve. Neglecting this aspect can be so detrimental to the company's growth since they play an integral part.This is why paying attention to people surrounding you also play an important role.
In sum, while we can't shy away from the fact that the internet and social medias is here to stay,we need to spend quality time to check onpeople that really matters to us, not just that, even strangers, as one listening sympathy could change that person's life. To improve humanity and humankind a perfect blend of spending quality time with people while engaging in one "busy" activity should be encouraged.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 470, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
...ng through plethora information to find whats important. I mostly agree with this sta...
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Line 1, column 674, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...neficial to sorting out informtion, and i would explain my opinion on this giving...
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Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , everyone
...rrently taken a lot if not everyone time,everyone get busy with their phones most time ei...
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Line 3, column 297, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
...ck on trendy news and get more aware of whats going on around them. For instance, a p...
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Line 3, column 576, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: he's
...n his related field. In such situation, hes trying to come up with a scientific res...
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Line 3, column 603, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'scientific research'.
Suggestion: scientific research
...h situation, hes trying to come up with a scientific research for the advancement of the 'world&...
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Line 3, column 782, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
... countries. For someone like this prof. he might not have the luxury of time to ha...
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Line 3, column 920, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: he's
...oncentrating more on research work, but hes investing more of that time to search f...
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Line 5, column 453, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... attention to some of his close friends so as to achieve a greater pursuits. For someone...
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Line 5, column 843, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...chit-chat with friends and family. This doesnt only apply to the big men in the world,...
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Line 7, column 341, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , that
... claim to be busy improving theior lives,that they neglect those that truly needs the...
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Line 7, column 870, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...growth since they play an integral part.This is why paying attention to people surro...
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Line 9, column 18, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... an important role. In sum, while we cant shy away from the fact that the interne...
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Line 9, column 97, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , we
...ternet and social medias is here to stay,we need to spend quality time to check onp...
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Line 9, column 248, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...ne listening sympathy could change that persons life. To improve humanity and humankind...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, honestly, however, if, really, so, well, while, as to, for instance, as well as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.9520958084 185% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 11.1786427146 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 78.0 28.8173652695 271% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 111.0 55.5748502994 200% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3656.0 2260.96107784 162% => OK
No of words: 752.0 441.139720559 170% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86170212766 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.23666099739 4.56307096286 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67445835236 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 360.0 204.123752495 176% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478723404255 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 1129.5 705.55239521 160% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.3200409788 57.8364921388 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.571428571 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8571428571 23.324526521 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35714285714 5.70786347227 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 8.20758483034 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245185192519 0.218282227539 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655429659398 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0508719279184 0.0701772020484 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142424850559 0.128457276422 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316289655711 0.0628817314937 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 149.0 98.500998004 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 470, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
...ng through plethora information to find whats important. I mostly agree with this sta...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 674, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...neficial to sorting out informtion, and i would explain my opinion on this giving...
^
Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , everyone
...rrently taken a lot if not everyone time,everyone get busy with their phones most time ei...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 297, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
...ck on trendy news and get more aware of whats going on around them. For instance, a p...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 576, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: he's
...n his related field. In such situation, hes trying to come up with a scientific res...
^^^
Line 3, column 603, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'scientific research'.
Suggestion: scientific research
...h situation, hes trying to come up with a scientific research for the advancement of the 'world&...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 782, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
... countries. For someone like this prof. he might not have the luxury of time to ha...
^^
Line 3, column 920, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: he's
...oncentrating more on research work, but hes investing more of that time to search f...
^^^
Line 5, column 453, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... attention to some of his close friends so as to achieve a greater pursuits. For someone...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 843, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...chit-chat with friends and family. This doesnt only apply to the big men in the world,...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 341, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , that
... claim to be busy improving theior lives,that they neglect those that truly needs the...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 870, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...growth since they play an integral part.This is why paying attention to people surro...
^^^^
Line 9, column 18, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... an important role. In sum, while we cant shy away from the fact that the interne...
^^^^
Line 9, column 97, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , we
...ternet and social medias is here to stay,we need to spend quality time to check onp...
^^^
Line 9, column 248, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...ne listening sympathy could change that persons life. To improve humanity and humankind...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, honestly, however, if, really, so, well, while, as to, for instance, as well as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.9520958084 185% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 11.1786427146 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 78.0 28.8173652695 271% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 111.0 55.5748502994 200% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3656.0 2260.96107784 162% => OK
No of words: 752.0 441.139720559 170% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86170212766 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.23666099739 4.56307096286 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67445835236 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 360.0 204.123752495 176% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478723404255 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 1129.5 705.55239521 160% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.3200409788 57.8364921388 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.571428571 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8571428571 23.324526521 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35714285714 5.70786347227 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 8.20758483034 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245185192519 0.218282227539 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655429659398 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0508719279184 0.0701772020484 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142424850559 0.128457276422 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316289655711 0.0628817314937 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 149.0 98.500998004 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.