Young people enjoy life more than the older people do
I disagree with the statement that young people enjoy life more than their older counterparts. Somehow people misinterpretes that since the young people tend to have much more time ahead of them, they will enjoy life more. I am against such idea because young people tend to live under the anxiety that they have to make life-changing decision from now and then while the olders, who already made theirs years ago, are more likely to be relexed even if something unexpected and terrible happens.
Young people today are facing a more sophisticated and competitive world than the one their older counterparts faced when they were younger. For the young, they have to acquire more hard-core skills in order to be hired, they spend way more time to study at school but most of them still end up with an underpaid job. In order to get a decent job, young people have to make their choices at a rather young age to determine where their futures will lead. For example, they have to decide whether to go to university or not, what major to study, and whether or not to form a family, if yes, when and with whom. With such important life choices to make, young people are too anxious to enjoy life. Unlike young young people who are under the pressure brought by so-call possibilities of life, the older ones are more likely to enjoy their lives since there are less life dicision left for them to make, thus they are under less life pressure.
Some may argue that the olders are under more pressure because they are usually the bread-winners of the families which urges them to work harder. It is reaonable that older people with family responsibilities are stressed out due to time allocation betweent life and work. Notwithstandly, the olders are more experienced in terms of balancing family and work because they have been trying for years while the younger just struggle to manage. More experience comes with less anxiety.
In sum, I insist that young people enjoy life less than the older people do since the young people are under more pressure to make the life decisions while the olders who already made their own.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 549, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...ersity or not, what major to study, and whether or not to form a family, if yes, when and with...
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Line 5, column 704, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: young
...e are too anxious to enjoy life. Unlike young young people who are under the pressure broug...
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Line 9, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...under less life pressure. Some may argue that the olders are under more pressure...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, still, then, thus, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1763.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76486486486 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38078042094 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489189189189 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 564.3 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.2966113763 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.928571429 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4285714286 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92857142857 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.548034764874 0.236089414692 232% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.242935261469 0.076458572812 318% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.19240303421 0.0737576698707 261% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.431308949802 0.150856017488 286% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.172920815579 0.0645574589148 268% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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