Your government has just recently received a large donation from an anonymous donar to improve the community. Almost everyone agrees with the money should be invested in building a new public facility. which of the following do you think your government should build?
-build a public library
-build a public park
build a public school
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
A development of a society means a automatic development of people living there. In the given scenario, It is said that If someday our community get a donation then where should we allocate that money either to make public library ,public park or public pool. Meanwhile, I am of the opinion that those money should be spend on making public park . I feel this way for several reason which I will explore in the subsequent paragraphs.
To start with, park provide us a fresh air and place to rest. In my community, there are tons of people and most of them are senior citizen. In addition, there is a necessity of park so that they could go there get some air and spend time with there friends. For instance, my grandmom, she always says if there was a park here, then I would go there every morning with my friends and get some fresh air. Besides, In the world of crowded people, I could spend some me time there since the environment would be very peaceful. Therefore, thinking of these words from my granny, it is valid to spend money in building public park.
Next, not only the old ones but the young ones can also obtain benefit from parks. To be more precise, adults are very concious about their health and are more into doing exercise, yoga etc to remain fit. Similarly, we don’t have open space to do these things in our homes. If there was a park, then everyone would go there and do some physical exercises in a fresh air. Drawing from my own experience, every morning, I always manage to do yoga although I do not have enough space in my house. And sometimes I wonder how good It would be If there was a park in my community. I would go there everyday to do exercise and sometimes to expend my spare time in a quite surrounding. Hence, we all the people of our community are in need of public park.
All things considered, even though building a library and a pool are also not a bad idea but we are more in need of park as it suited all age group. Thus, building a public park is more welcoming than others.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...that money either to make public library ,public park or public pool. Meanwhile, I...
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Message: Did you mean 'this money' or 'those moneys', 'those monies'?
Suggestion: this money; those moneys; those monies
...ol. Meanwhile, I am of the opinion that those money should be spend on making public park ....
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Message: Did you mean 'spent'?
Suggestion: spent
... the opinion that those money should be spend on making public park . I feel this way...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ey should be spend on making public park . I feel this way for several reason whic...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'several reasons'.
Suggestion: several reasons
...aking public park . I feel this way for several reason which I will explore in the subsequent ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eful. Therefore, thinking of these words from my granny, it is valid to spend mon...
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... park in my community. I would go there everyday to do exercise and sometimes to expend ...
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, hence, if, similarly, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for instance, i feel, in addition, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1657.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.3835978836 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36050008513 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505291005291 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.8948215726 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.85 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133324460589 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0441651854738 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381850777974 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0843625500507 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0334688034004 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.12 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.83 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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