These days, many young adults attend schools away from their homes to attain strong academic background. In this regard, policy-makers and school administrators evaluate the merit and demerit of providing suitable space in dorms to enhance the quality of these students’ lives, ranging from education to relaxation. As for the writer’s perspective, I highly recommend constructing a workout room inside the dorms. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint through two compelling reasons.
The first and paramount reason is that students who are used to doing daily workouts are more likely to have better academic performance. A gym inside the residence hall allows students to allocate regular time for daily physical exercise without dissipating considerable time for traveling. So, they can develop a do-list that helps to manage time properly for their activities. Consequently, they never procrastinate their assignment and get accustomed to reading class material before and after lectures. Furthermore, many studies have revealed that physical activity can improve the memory and concentration of students. For example, if not for being gym inside my dormitory and my daily exercise habit, I would not learn Spanish in high school.
The second reason is that regular physical practice is associated with mental and physical health. No one can gainsay that young persons are susceptible to obesity due to eating unhealthy food. So, if a school establishes a gym in students’ accommodation, it can encourage them to set a routine for exercise to lose their extra weight and strengthen their muscles. In addition, this valuable habit has a profoundly positive impact on anxiety, depression and helps to relieve the stress and pressure of exams. Also, they can find it a chance to make new friendships with similar goals and priorities and helpful amusement for their spare time. Therefore, there is a close link between access to an exercise room in dormitories and students’ physical and psychological health.
To sum up, all reasons mentioned above lead us to conclude that schools should allocate their budget for gym facilities.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, furthermore, if, second, so, then, therefore, as for, for example, in addition, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42603550296 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96970688672 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615384615385 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.1735847721 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.882352941 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8823529412 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82352941176 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293187402015 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0829071345954 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611556102258 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162916022123 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388111546256 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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