Without a shadow of a doubt, recreation activities play a pivotal role in unwinding the stresses of this hectic world. An unanswered question in this area is governments should provide budgets for which kinds of these activities. Despite arguments asserting that sports entertainment enhances individuals’ physical and mental health, I believe otherwise, maintaining that the provision of funds for social activities is a wiser decision for politicians. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint through two compelling reasons.
The first exquisite point corroborating my stance on this subject is that given the informative nature of museums and concert halls, people can be familiar with the arts and culture of their own country and other nations. There is no question that an art museum is an ideal way to learn about different types of art that had been popular among inhabitants of different historical periods and countries. Just by observation their work, one can understand their beliefs, cultures, and morals. For instance, if we see ancient musical instruments of Iran, we would understand that music had been an essential part of the Persian people. Similarly, theater performers represent the belief and thought of people lived in specific centuries and countries.
Another reason to be mentioned is the government supports a wide variety of communities and generations by establishing new art museums and amphitheaters. Elderly and disabled people can enjoy alongside their family watching a movie or participating in a concert. Furthermore, a lucrative opportunity is provided for artisans and musicians to present their artworks and talent publicly and make a fortune in this way. Unlike physical facilities, the value of performance buildings increases progressively over a period of years, and they will be considered a tourism hotspot and attract a large number of visitors. For example, had my country’s government not built cinemas and museums 40 years ago, my hometown would not thrive in the tourism industry.
Reflecting upon all grounds mentioned above, one soon realizes that government should spare no expense in constructing public art museums and theaters and not begrudge any penny spent.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, similarly, so, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1901.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47838616715 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06606302437 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631123919308 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0761599444 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.733333333 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1333333333 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26666666667 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139728723774 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0417868127664 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0293348274147 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0807334059881 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00831842688413 0.0645574589148 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.1 8.01818996416 126% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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