Undoubtedly, poaching has always been a controversial topic among government and wildlife experts. More specifically, the writer puts forth on the idea that there are some ways to poaching rhinoceros. How ever the professor points out that there are some serious flaws in the writer's claim. To be exact, the professor believes that saving rhinoceros is not an easy thing to do. She more or less addresses the problem with each point made in the reading.
First of all, the writer claims that dehorning Rhinos would make them less attractive to poachers. He thinks removing horns of Rhinos would not hurting them and it can be done easily with right medical equipments. But the professor refutes with the point and and says that dehorning Rhinos is not practical. Remove horns from Rhinos require finding them, doing surgery on them and it cost lots of time and money. Beside that, Rhinos use their horn to dig for water, looking for food and protect their yaunges and teritory.
Secondly, the reading states that educating consumers would help with reduce the demand for horns on the market. If consumers comperhands that horns are useless in medical treatment, they no longer buy them for medicines. The professor, not surprisigly though, believes that people have really strong cultural belief in health benefits of Rhinos horns. She think these kinda old believes came from ancient time in their culture and can not be changed by educating.
Finally, author wraps up the topic by claiming that legalize government sales of Rhino horn would reduce prices on them and it will be no longer profitable for poachers to hunt Rhinos. Then again professor stays on the other side of the argument and says that legalizing sales of horns end up in larger market. Lots of people wouldn't buy horns now because they are illegal and expensive, but if government sales them, demands increase and poachers have larger market to hunt for.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 202, Rule ID: HOW_EVER[1]
Message: Did you mean 'however'?
Suggestion: However
...e are some ways to poaching rhinoceros. How ever the professor points out that there are...
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Line 3, column 145, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'hurt'
Suggestion: hurt
...inks removing horns of Rhinos would not hurting them and it can be done easily with rig...
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Line 3, column 256, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: and
...ut the professor refutes with the point and and says that dehorning Rhinos is not pract...
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Line 5, column 358, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'She' must be used with a third-person verb: 'thinks'.
Suggestion: thinks
...in health benefits of Rhinos horns. She think these kinda old believes came from anci...
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Line 7, column 327, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...end up in larger market. Lots of people wouldnt buy horns now because they are illegal ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, then, first of all, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 7.30242825607 219% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1611.0 1373.03311258 117% => OK
No of words: 323.0 270.72406181 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98761609907 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41973787078 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 145.348785872 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56346749226 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 419.366225166 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.958509708 49.2860985944 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.7647058824 110.228320801 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 21.698381199 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47058823529 7.06452816374 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316724512375 0.272083759551 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0950929498145 0.0996497079465 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688651096595 0.0662205650399 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18339465153 0.162205337803 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0862696812895 0.0443174109184 195% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.3589403974 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 63.6247240618 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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