Altruism and study of meerkats
The discussion here is about atruistic behaviour commonly observed in animals and mammals like humans too. Altruism is a practice of selfless act. Altruist person gains nothing and practices austerity at a low level. That person or animal lives in self denial. Sometimes the altruist may gain some intangible values like appreciation in society and might be at a safer place. Sometimes atruists are also misunderstood to being wicked.
The passage discusses atruistic behaviour observed in meerkats. A standing guard known as sentinel protects the group of meerkats while they are finding food and sends an alarming signal when the predator like hawk is seen. To which the lecture makes an opposite statement, based on the recent very keenly observed study on meerkats, the lecturer says the alarming sign might catch the attention of the predator and the other meerkat's of the same group might be at greater danger.
The passage states when other meerkats of the group are eating the sentinel stands outside and if the predator comes the guard gets nothing to eat and there is no gain for the guard. In contrast to this the lecture says the guard eats first so it has a full stomach and since the guard is standing outside he has a better chance to escape and run towards the burrow.
Moreover the passage compares the same altruistic behaviour in humans, when a person donates his/her kidney to a relative or a stranger he gets nothing in return although the lecture mentions the increased self worth in the family and appreciation is a kind of non-material gain.
To conclude, the passage states that altruists gain nothing in return. But the lecture mentions the perks and intangible gains, which are also equally important, received by selfless animals and people.
- TOEFL Official Guide - Practice Test 2 - Integrated Writing - Professors on TV 73
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- Altruism and study of meerkats 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...o escape and run towards the burrow. Moreover the passage compares the same altruisti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, while, in contrast, kind of, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 7.30242825607 205% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 22.412803532 40% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1486.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 296.0 270.72406181 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02027027027 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54663408099 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533783783784 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 419.366225166 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.5355688273 49.2860985944 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.142857143 110.228320801 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1428571429 21.698381199 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06452816374 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0997992751521 0.272083759551 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0309538664525 0.0996497079465 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539663417005 0.0662205650399 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0410221516073 0.162205337803 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462489463155 0.0443174109184 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.3589403974 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 63.6247240618 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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