consumption of cigarette and junk food

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consumption of cigarette and junk food.

I the reading indicates some methods to decrease consumption of cigarette and junk food.
In the first argument, the reading materials point out that the government should be exposing more taxes on cigarettes and unhealthy food. This government’s strategy will lead to reducing of cigarette and malnutrition foods since of the high cost of it. On the other hand, the speaker disagrees with this strategy because of the following reason. First of all, the high price of cigarettes, which causes buying low-quality products that it would be high-risking to health. Moreover, a high price is a concept that would be of high quality. Were unhealthy food to high-cost, the people would purchase to buy more and more junk food and malnutrition foods.
Secondly, there is some arguments in the case of fairing the tax to buy cigarette and unhealthy food. I the text posed that it is unfair that the medical, governmental budget waste on someone that does not care about his health with smoking and unhealthy food. Conversely, in the lecture, discussed that these strategies is not applicable because of some reasons. Firstly, there is not the homogeneous state of income in society. These plans will expose more pressure on low-income compared to high-salary.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 11, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are some arguments'?
Suggestion: there are some arguments
...ood and malnutrition foods. Secondly, there is some arguments in the case of fairing the tax to buy c...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 508, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... on low-income compared to high-salary.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, first, firstly, moreover, second, secondly, so, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1054.0 1373.03311258 77% => OK
No of words: 205.0 270.72406181 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14146341463 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78388967377 4.04702891845 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84083422323 2.5805825403 110% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 145.348785872 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551219512195 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 321.3 419.366225166 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.2563703053 49.2860985944 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.8333333333 110.228320801 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0833333333 21.698381199 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58333333333 7.06452816374 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292752686521 0.272083759551 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111425887409 0.0996497079465 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.152856373175 0.0662205650399 231% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.27823277741 0.162205337803 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.185181998312 0.0443174109184 418% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 63.6247240618 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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