Essay topics: TPO-43 - Integrated Writing TaskAgnostids were a group of marine animals that became extinct about 450 million years ago. Agnostid fossils can be found in rocks in many areas around the world. From the fossil remains, we know that agnostids

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Essay topics: TPO-43 - Integrated Writing Task

Agnostids were a group of marine animals that became extinct about 450 million years ago. Agnostid fossils can be found in rocks in many areas around the world. From the fossil remains, we know that agnostids were primitive arthropods-relatives of modern-day insects. However, the fossil information does not allow paleontologists to determine with certainty what agnostids ate or how they behaved. There are several different theories about how agnostids may have lived.

Free-Swimming Predators

First, the agnostids may have been free-swimming predators that hunted smaller animals. It is known that other types of primitive arthropods were strong swimmers and active predators, so it is reasonable that the agnostids may have lived that way as well And while the agnostids were small, sometimes just six millimeters long, there were plenty of smaller organisms in the ancient ocean for them to prey on.

Seafloor Dwellers

Second, they may have dwelled on the seafloor. Again, there are examples of other types of primitive arthropods living this way, so it is possible that agnostids did too. On the seafloor they would have survived by scavenging dead organisms or by grazing on bacteria.

Parasites

Third, there is the possibility that the agnostids were parasites, living on and feeding off larger organisms. One reason that this seems possible is that there are many species of modern-day arthropods that exist as parasites, such as fleas, ticks, and mites. The agnostids might have lived on primitive fish or even on other, larger arthropods.

The reading passage claims that the Agnostids were a marine animal about 450 million years ago and because there are not any significant fossil records of them, so, it is not simple to clarify the way of eating or the space of they lived. In this way the reading claims that there are three specific reason for possibility of the lifestyle of these creatures. While, the lecturer on the other hand claims that these three argument are erronious and she states they are not possible for agnostids living situation.

Firstly, the lecture claims that the possibility of being agnostids a free-swimming predators is nearly zero. Because, these modern predators have a incredibly powerful and well developed eyes for chasing the prays, while, according to the fossil records, the agnostids had a minuscular and tiny eyes which by these eyes they were virtually blind which as one of the consequences they can't find the prays by eye cahseing. Maybe there was other chasing mechanism which it is not supported by any evidences.

Secondly, the lecturer refuses the seafloor dwellers assumption and claims that it is wrong reason either. As the most primitive arthropods had this way of living it makes them so slow. And according to the evidenced they can not go very long distance while the agnostids had a vast geograficial area which they can go through it and gathering the foods and furthermore, they were remarkebly a speady creatures.

Finally, the speaker is not convinced by the parasites argument in the reading that as the modern parasites like fleas, tiks and mites theagnostids were the same kind. While, as the parasites had a special behavior that they absolutely kill their host, so they have not a lot population whereas they had a lot of different kinds of the parasites. While, the agnostids had a widespread population in pone area as the fossile recored show this fact.

Conclusively, it can be said that the whole argument of the reading is misleading and it is very crucial that the scientist have an eye on this fact.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 85, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'predator'?
Suggestion: predator
...lity of being agnostids a free-swimming predators is nearly zero. Because, these modern p...
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Line 3, column 148, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...o. Because, these modern predators have a incredibly powerful and well developed ...
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Line 3, column 386, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...d which as one of the consequences they cant find the prays by eye cahseing. Maybe t...
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Line 5, column 108, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... claims that it is wrong reason either. As the most primitive arthropods had this...
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Line 5, column 140, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...either. As the most primitive arthropods had this way of living it makes them so ...
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Line 7, column 46, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parasites'' or 'parasite's'?
Suggestion: parasites'; parasite's
...ly, the speaker is not convinced by the parasites argument in the reading that as the mod...
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Line 7, column 241, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ecial behavior that they absolutely kill their host, so they have not a lot popul...
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Line 9, column 124, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...nd it is very crucial that the scientist have an eye on this fact.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, whereas, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 22.412803532 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1701.0 1373.03311258 124% => OK
No of words: 345.0 270.72406181 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93043478261 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67428024657 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48115942029 0.540411800872 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 528.3 419.366225166 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.9831429073 49.2860985944 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.846153846 110.228320801 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5384615385 21.698381199 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.30769230769 7.06452816374 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360495569959 0.272083759551 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124423746385 0.0996497079465 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604197502409 0.0662205650399 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187208756678 0.162205337803 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0668533448522 0.0443174109184 151% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.3589403974 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 63.6247240618 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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