Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

I think the idea of offering of moeny to school-age children by thier parent is so bad idea for children. This view to the education will disturb the children at the future and also make them confused during their education life. This idea never can make the critical mind for students, also it will name as a reason of studing for children. And the students will not have any possitive point at longrun.

First point I would like to make is that a good educational system which parents of the student is one of it' s features is, which one that make the person problematical person. This student who is passed this system process, he or she will be a creative person. But if the parents pay them for their works, they will not have a critical mind which always be in love by the courses and they are always awaited for the money and not lessons.

The next point I would like to make is that if the parents pay their children, they never can reach a good position in their
lives. And because the children are always studying their lessons for money, when this pay off be finished, they will finish their educational life. For example, the parents of one of my fiends paid him a lot of money during our secondary school, and he was very good at his scores but after some year when we must be entered to the university he can not go to any university because that colegous needed a standard level of education and he never had any sense of science so he could not enter to the university.

Finally, at the long-run such student will not have any chance to go to the job market at a good situation. Because they have not any science or craft, they never find a good job position.

At the end if the parents pay their children for their scores, that parents are destroying their children future lives. And if they want their children be a spacial person at the future they must never pay them and do not change their mind to the negitive direction.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...never can reach a good position in their lives. And because the children are alwa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, second, so, for example, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1601.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.43490304709 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28236357264 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421052631579 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 495.9 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.4875151776 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.357142857 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7857142857 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270500510786 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113391279239 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0816871965859 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152091891117 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565315850917 0.0645574589148 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.71 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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