Integrated 31: The evidences which approved Sinasauropteryx was feathered dianosaure

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Integrated 31: The evidences which approved Sinasauropteryx was feathered dianosaure

In this set of materials, the professor mainly discuses …, while the professor casts doubt on what is presented in the text and believes that..
First of all, in the text it is clearly mentioned that … However, the professor claims that
In addition, the professor disagree with the statement that … He points out that
Finally, although in the text it is states that .. , the professor subscribes to the view point that

In this set of materials, the professor mainly discusses critics which have opposed the idea that Sinasauropteryx was a feathered dinosaur, while the professor casts doubt on what is presented in the text and believes that all the evidences are strong and the arguments is unconvincing.
First of all, in the text it is clearly mentioned that the fine lines may have be decomposed skin which turned to fibers due to volcanic ash. However, the professor claims that such these decomposition have not been recorder by any fossils in same site, In fact, all the fossils have been pretty preserved by the volcanic ashes, and proved that the lines feathers not the fibers which had been produced from the skin.
In addition, the professor disagrees with the statement that fine line are remains of frills not the feathers. She points out that these structures have completely different chemical elements. The feather contains particular type of protein that the frill does not have and chemical analysis of the fossils conclude that specific protein. Consequently, the remained structures are feathers not frills.
Finally, although in the text it is stated that the placement of lines made them quite useless, the professor subscribes to the view point that the feathers have a variety of functions. For instance, some birds have beautiful feathers on their tail to attract their mates. Therefore, the Sinasauropteryx\s feathers had some functional reasons. Beside this issue that the analysis of the line revealed that the feather were colorful, orange and white, which is very supportive evidence that Sinasauropteryx was feathered dinosaur.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...hat … However, the professor claims that In addition, the professor disagree with...
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...ssor subscribes to the view point that   In this set of materials, the professor ...
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... mentioned that the fine lines may have be decomposed skin which turned to fibers ...
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Message: Did you mean 'this decomposition' or 'these decompositions'?
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...However, the professor claims that such these decomposition have not been recorder by any fossils i...
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Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'first of all']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.260162601626 0.261695866417 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.165311653117 0.158904122519 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0569105691057 0.0723426182421 79% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0514905149051 0.0435111971325 118% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0243902439024 0.0277247811725 88% => OK
Prepositions: 0.151761517615 0.128828473217 118% => OK
Participles: 0.0433604336043 0.0370669169778 117% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.76973804336 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0135501355014 0.0208969081088 65% => OK
Particles: 0.00542005420054 0.00154638098197 350% => OK
Determiners: 0.140921409214 0.128158765124 110% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00271002710027 0.0158828679856 17% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0162601626016 0.0114777025283 142% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2081.0 1645.83664459 126% => OK
No of words: 338.0 271.125827815 125% => OK
Chars per words: 6.15680473373 6.08160592843 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.04852973271 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.355029585799 0.374372842146 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.292899408284 0.287516216867 102% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.251479289941 0.187439937562 134% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.156804733728 0.113142543107 139% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76973804336 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452662721893 0.539623497131 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.6297330646 53.8517498576 85% => OK
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0529801325 84% => OK
Sentence length: 30.7272727273 21.7502111507 141% => OK
Sentence length SD: 180.06816891 49.3711431718 365% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 189.181818182 132.220823453 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.7272727273 21.7502111507 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.18181818182 0.878197800319 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.09492273731 195% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 3.39072847682 236% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 60.0172135557 50.5018328374 119% => OK
Elegance: 1.88764044944 1.90840788429 99% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210552803398 0.549887131256 38% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.151816305206 0.142949733639 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.100569976497 0.0787303798458 128% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.731033292984 0.631733273073 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.246753846138 0.139662658121 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104932217201 0.266732575781 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065467339777 0.103435571967 63% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.440575587956 0.414875509568 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0349915395562 0.0530846634433 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134962148746 0.40443939384 33% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618426284729 0.0528353158467 117% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.26048565121 94% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 3.49668874172 114% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.62251655629 83% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 3.1766004415 126% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 10.2958057395 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Not in a correct format.

The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%) but more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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