The populations of many fish species are rapidly disappearing due to overfishing and pollution. There are many ways to address this issue, and one of the most popular is aquaculture, also known as fish farming. Raising fish in a controlled environment has many advantages in addition to providing a stable supply of food. Here are some of the most important reasons that aquaculture should be widely adopted.
First, aquaculture can help to protect coastal areas. The majority of fish farms are built on or near coastlines as they require clean seawater to operate. So, the farmers are very careful about keeping their environment clean. In addition, the farms often take up land that would otherwise be used for industry or housing, both of which generate large amounts of pollution. By occupying this land, fish farms would keep the coastal areas cleaner.
Second, aquaculture is good for local economies. Many of the regions that are best suited to aquaculture are located in poor countries that have high unemployment rates. Fish farming is intensive work that requires many people to function smoothly. Much of the labor is manual and unskilled, so anyone can do it with a little training. Therefore, creating fish farms would provide much-needed jobs to the communities where they are built.
Third, aquaculture relieves pressure on wild populations of fish. Many species of fish have declined to dangerously small populations, so they must be protected from going extinct. Creating a new and dependable supply of fish would reduce the need for fishing. If enough fish farms are constructed, they could replace the wild fish that are currently being caught and consumed. That would allow wild fish populations to recover and prevent them from being overfished again
Both the lecture and the reading passage discuss aquaculture. While the reading passage mentions three benefits of fish farming which is known as aquaculture, the lecture contradicts all the three benefits.
First and foremost, the professor in the lecture explains how fish farming ulters the ecosystem. It has a major role in destroying the natural habitats of the species living there. And, example of that a forest that contaning different species counterline stripped away. This directly contrasts the reading passagae, which claims that aquaculture aids in obtaining cleaner costal area.
Secondly, the speaker suggests that fish farming does not help the economy. So most of the farmers in poor areas actually relay on fishing, by two main ways, eating them and sell the surplus on market. Therefore, by applying these farms, more farmers will end up with no jobs. Again, this contradict with the reading passage, which states that it will benefit the economy and will increase the oppors to hire more farmers.
Finally, the professor mentions that fish farming will cause more pressure on wild animals. Since preditorand wild fishes feed on these other fishes in the ocean. Eventually, this will help in increase the rate of extenction of wild creatures. On the other, hand the reading passage argues that aquaculture will deacrese the pressure on wild fishes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 10.4613686534 10% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 30.3222958057 82% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1159.0 1373.03311258 84% => OK
No of words: 219.0 270.72406181 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29223744292 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5262575132 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58904109589 0.540411800872 109% => OK
syllable_count: 345.6 419.366225166 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.7341193352 49.2860985944 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.7857142857 110.228320801 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6428571429 21.698381199 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 7.06452816374 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176675743337 0.272083759551 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.06327146514 0.0996497079465 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0570516875155 0.0662205650399 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105256118691 0.162205337803 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0289379172032 0.0443174109184 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 53.8541721854 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 63.6247240618 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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