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raising tax on cigars and junk food

The main topic of both reading and lecture is tax rise on unhealthy materials. According to the lecture it would be reasonable if government raises taxes on unhealthy behaviors like junk food and smoking. However, the lecturer refutes it by citing three explanations.
The author asserts that raising tax on cigars and unhealthy food would lead in a discouragement of consuming them. The passage points out that higher tax on tabacco resulted in less cigarettes demand, so the same process can go for unhealthy food. Secondly, the reading asserts that this tax would be totally fair due to the diseases these harmful things would bring. Thus, it is justified to use this extra tax for the medical health services might be given to cigarettes consumers in the future. Moreover, it claims that these taxes can be good sources of income for the government and authorities can use them to build public recreation places such as parks or stadiums, they can be even used on public education plans and benefits everyone.
On the other hand, the lecturer claims that raising taxes won't readily lead to all aforementioned results. She states that raising tax on cigarettes wouldn't necessarily decrease its consumption. People might buy cheaper cigars which contain more harmful substances and put their life in greater risk. As a result if taxes on junk food rise, people will spend more money on them and less money will be left for them to afford healthy foods. In addition, she says that fair has different meanings in different perspectives. So raising tax on some specific materials would just expand the differences between poor and rich people, as far as affluent people can still afford them but poor people should give up on them, which is not fair. At last, she claims that these easy come revenue might become a habit to the government and they just stop other plans for enhancing public health like banning cigarettes at parks and public places.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 177, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun cigarettes is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... that higher tax on tabacco resulted in less cigarettes demand, so the same process ...
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Line 2, column 231, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s demand, so the same process can go for unhealthy food. Secondly, the reading as...
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Line 3, column 149, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...e states that raising tax on cigarettes wouldnt necessarily decrease its consumption. P...
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Line 3, column 405, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oney on them and less money will be left for them to afford healthy foods. In add...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, thus, in addition, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 5.04856512141 317% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1623.0 1373.03311258 118% => OK
No of words: 328.0 270.72406181 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94817073171 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54691078289 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 145.348785872 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545731707317 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 419.366225166 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3712440011 49.2860985944 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.2 110.228320801 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8666666667 21.698381199 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06452816374 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315452943622 0.272083759551 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11278253862 0.0996497079465 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108241084014 0.0662205650399 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226567754593 0.162205337803 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0153837634245 0.0443174109184 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.3589403974 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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