reading passage was about evidences for recognizing a portrait of Jane Austen - mahdieh
In this set of material the reading passage was about evidences for recognizing a portrait of Jane Austen, and the listening passage was about a lecture by a professor about the reading which disagrees with the ideas mentioned in the reading passage.
According to the reading passage there is a painting that is not yet surely related to late Jane Austen the well-known writer of England that her novels has got real attractive for the Hollywood film makers lately; However, there are some evidences that maybe proves that it's Jane's portrait. The First evidence is a painting that her sister, Cassandra, not so professionally painted of her which they think it's similar to the portrait. The second evidence is her family's acclaim, her family believes that it's Jane's portrait. The third evidence is by the style of the painting, it was painted by Ozias Humphrey. His active time concur with Jane Austen’s teenage period, as the girl in the picture is a teenager.
According to the listening passage the professor disagreed with the ideas presented in the reading passage because of some reasons. First the family that acclaimed it was Jane’s portrait haven’t ever seen her because she died 70 years before of that time.
Overall, the ideas presented in the listening passage disagreed with the reading passage.
His active time concur with Jane Austen’s teenage period,
His active time concurs with Jane Austen’s teenage period,
flaws:
More content wanted for the arguments by the lecture.
The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Don't need to reiterate the contents of reading passages or as less as possible.
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
Read sample essays from ETS:
http://www.testbig.com/users/toeflwritingmaster
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 15 in 30
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 12
No. of Words: 219 250
No. of Characters: 1077 1200
No. of Different Words: 106 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.847 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.918 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.469 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 67 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 39 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.954 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.454 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.672 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.205 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4