Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
In my point of view this statement should be determined on the case by case basis. based on the children need and want. I totally admit that in our societies it is really hard for parent to balance their responsibility and I think they scapegoat themselves to their children comfort. By the way I think that they should have manage those little time by their children to help their needs and their need are really different some needs help on schoolwork and some need sport. I want to reinforce my opinion from the following aspects.
First, parents can easily understand their children need and manage their free time to help children. For example, both of my parents were work like a crazy at week day and we have a little free time to spend with each other. On those time, they asked my schoolwork and check them. After that they take a quiz from the important subjects and after then they theirs to solve my problems. my mother work with me and my dad would work with my sister because she is older than me and her lessons are harder. and if there was a time left, we go out and play with each other.
The latter reason why I generally think that they it should determine in case by case basis is that if children supposed to do any home work, they cannot enjoy at the play. i.e. I never can forget the time that I supposed to do soil model in little scale and since I know that if my parent knows that, we can't go to park. I didn't tell them. Besides, I couldn’t enjoy on my play on the park and tomorrow on the school I got problem all of my groupmates and we lots those project grade.
The last but not the least, I think that if parent receive to their children lessons regularly, children naturally have few problems on the next week. Therefore, they can go out. when I remember those days that we spend with our parent, we just study until the lunch on our lessons and after that as a reward we went out for lunch. this behavioral really encourage us to study and I learn from my parent that how use time although I have few times.
In a nutshell, it was hard for my parent to manage their time and actually they did not rest, but now they all the time says that they are pride of us and we really love them because we saw their hard working and try for us. Now I got my master and my sister studies on PhD which is not achievable if they don't manage their spare time to our needs. Therefore, based on the reasons I mentioned above I think that we can’t give one answer to this question and it should be determined on case by case children need basis.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, but, first, if, really, so, then, therefore, for example, i suppose, i think, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 5.04856512141 297% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 24.0 7.30242825607 329% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 107.0 22.412803532 477% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 30.3222958057 201% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2096.0 1373.03311258 153% => OK
No of words: 489.0 270.72406181 181% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.28629856851 5.08290768461 84% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.04702891845 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.21888269945 2.5805825403 86% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 145.348785872 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441717791411 0.540411800872 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 639.0 419.366225166 152% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.55342163355 84% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 3.25607064018 461% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 8.23620309051 24% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 13.0662251656 168% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.59802391 49.2860985944 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2727272727 110.228320801 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2272727273 21.698381199 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86363636364 7.06452816374 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 4.19205298013 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 4.33554083885 323% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22292640275 0.272083759551 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0742641839177 0.0996497079465 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060523375263 0.0662205650399 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141814622632 0.162205337803 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374895142769 0.0443174109184 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.3589403974 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.53 53.8541721854 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.0289183223 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.9 12.2367328918 65% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.6 8.42419426049 78% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 63.6247240618 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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