The reading passage claims that Altruism is an act that is done out of selflessness and brings number of examples to support this point. However, the lecturer disagrees with points in the passage.
The passage says that meerkats, which stand on guard while other group members look for food, perform a selfless act. The lecturer refutes this point by mentioning a newer study, which has discovred that the meerkats that stand guard are usually already well fed, while others have to scavange what they can. Therefore, the guard meerkats are in a better position in some ways.
Another point made in the passage is that when the meerkats that stand guard sound an alarm, they put themelves at greater risk, since they are alone and far from the group. However, the lecturer also disagrees with this point. A different study found that meerkats that stand guard are usually close to borrows and thus can get to the shelter quickly after sounding the alarm. In addition, large group of meerkats usually attract the attention of the predator as well. Thus meerkats on the guard duty can be safer than those in the group.
Finally, the lecturer also claims that altruistic acts performed by humans mentioned in the passage, might not be selfless at all. She states that a family member that gives their organ for someone else does in fact recieve some imaterial benefits, such as apretiation or increased self worth.
- Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? 70
- TOEFL integrated writing: Altruism. 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The reading passage claims that Altruism...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...are in a better position in some ways. Another point made in the passage is tha...
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Line 3, column 307, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'borrow'.
Suggestion: borrow
...s that stand guard are usually close to borrows and thus can get to the shelter quickly...
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Line 3, column 473, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... the attention of the predator as well. Thus meerkats on the guard duty can be safer...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... can be safer than those in the group. Finally, the lecturer also claims that a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, look, so, therefore, thus, well, while, in addition, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1177.0 1373.03311258 86% => OK
No of words: 240.0 270.72406181 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90416666667 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93597934253 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27027516076 2.5805825403 88% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 145.348785872 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5875 0.540411800872 109% => OK
syllable_count: 345.6 419.366225166 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5347089836 49.2860985944 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0833333333 110.228320801 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 21.698381199 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.08333333333 7.06452816374 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0140836872392 0.272083759551 5% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00591534477892 0.0996497079465 6% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0196189791373 0.0662205650399 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0142471269771 0.162205337803 9% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246767477863 0.0443174109184 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.3589403974 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 53.8541721854 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 63.6247240618 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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