Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
At some point every young adult faces the choice of moving out on their own or staying at their parents home. This is a very important decision that can affect individuals growth as a person, as well as their financial situation. I personally belive, that moving out is overall a better option as this forces person to face issiues on their own.
One of the main benefits of living alone is the greater sense of independence. Once a person starts living alone, he has to make his own decisions not just things concering the house, but all aspects of life. Young adults living alone can no longer ask their parents for help or advise on every decision they face and they have deal with consequncues of their actions on their own. Every person has to learn this one way or the other and the sooner they will do it, the better.
Another advantage of moving away from one's parents house is getting used to doing chores and housework. While this might not sound like a very attractive option, it has its share of benefits. Even if one were to stay with at his parents' house, they won't be there forever and there will come point where an adult will have to do the required housewrok. Learning new skills and getting used to different life style is much easier at earlier age rather than when one is a full grown adult.
In the end, while moving out and leaving alone might be expensive and more demanding than just staying at the parents' house, it has much larger benefits in the long run. Therefore, young adults should try to move in their own place if they have opportunity to do so.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 329, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'dealt'.
Suggestion: dealt
... every decision they face and they have deal with consequncues of their actions on t...
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Line 3, column 40, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... Another advantage of moving away from ones parents house is getting used to doing ...
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Line 3, column 138, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ework. While this might not sound like a very attractive option, it has its share...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, therefore, well, while, as to, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1295.0 1977.66487455 65% => OK
No of words: 289.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.48096885813 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2180389633 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553633217993 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.5156161656 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6153846154 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2307692308 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15384615385 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255531770341 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0928836152032 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0874595610614 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161802802705 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489677249735 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.0 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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