tpo 30
The reading and the lecture is discussing a device, called burning mirror, built and used by ancient greek to defend themselfs aganist roman navy attackes. While the reading mentions the reasons to support that greeks never built such a wepon device and this device was a myth, the lecture opposes all reasons that previously illustrated in the reading passage.
First, the lecture mentions that the device can be mad, with simple technology, from small sheets of copper that attached together to form a massive big copper sheet. The simple technology would be sufficent enough to produce a several meter copper mirror that could reflec sun light to burn roman navy ships. This contradicts with what the reading mentions. t.
Second, contrary to the belief in the reading passage that the device is inpractical and insufficent wepon because it required a non-moving object and time to set roman ships wood on fire, the lecture mentions that roman shaped was made from other materials rather than wood, like pitch. Pitch is a material that used by roman to stick the wood together to build their ships.Such a matetial is very inflamable and the burning mirror wepon could set this material on fire in just few seconds. That was another point were the lecture contradict the reading.
Finally, the author mentions that the greeks have no reasons to build the burrning mirror device since they use other weapons such as flaming arrows to burn approching roman navy ships. The lectlure refuts the idea by mentioning that the flaming arrows weapon is less efective than burning mirror because romans were familiar with how to deal with them. They could quickly put the fire off. In contrast, since they can't see the light waves from the new weapon device, they are not familiar with how to deal with maject fire that catch up in their ships suddenly. The surprising factor of the new weapon is very effective to burn roman ships. Therefore, the greeks have a good reason to build such a device.
Overall, it seems that the lecture showed that there are some discrepancies in the points illustrated in the reading material.
- tpo 34 70
- TPO-29 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 72
- tpo 46 using electronic medical records rather than paper-based records 73
- Easter IslandEaster Island, located in the Pacific Ocean about 4000 miles from the coast of Chile, is one of the most isolated places in the world. It is best known for the Moai, monolithic statues of human figures carved from volcanic rock and located a 81
- top 5 70
The reading and the lecture is discussing a device
The reading and the lecture are discussing a device
all reasons that previously illustrated in the reading passage.
all reasons that are previously illustrated in the reading passage.
all reasons previously illustrated in the reading passage.
the device is inpractical and insufficent wepon
the device is an inpractical and insufficent wepon
Pitch is a material that used by roman to stick
Pitch is a material that is used by roman to stick
Pitch is a material used by roman to stick
Sentence: The reading and the lecture is discussing a device, called burning mirror, built and used by ancient greek to defend themselfs aganist roman navy attackes.
Error: themselfs Suggestion: themselves
Error: aganist Suggestion: against
Error: attackes Suggestion: attacked
Sentence: While the reading mentions the reasons to support that greeks never built such a wepon device and this device was a myth, the lecture opposes all reasons that previously illustrated in the reading passage.
Error: wepon Suggestion: weapon
Sentence: The simple technology would be sufficent enough to produce a several meter copper mirror that could reflec sun light to burn roman navy ships.
Error: sufficent Suggestion: sufficient
Error: reflec Suggestion: reflect
Sentence: Second, contrary to the belief in the reading passage that the device is inpractical and insufficent wepon because it required a non-moving object and time to set roman ships wood on fire, the lecture mentions that roman shaped was made from other materials rather than wood, like pitch.
Error: inpractical Suggestion: impractical
Error: insufficent Suggestion: insufficient
Error: wepon Suggestion: weapon
Sentence: Pitch is a material that used by roman to stick the wood together to build their ships.Such a matetial is very inflamable and the burning mirror wepon could set this material on fire in just few seconds.
Error: wepon Suggestion: weapon
Error: inflamable Suggestion: inflammable
Error: matetial Suggestion: material
Sentence: Finally, the author mentions that the greeks have no reasons to build the burrning mirror device since they use other weapons such as flaming arrows to burn approching roman navy ships.
Error: burrning Suggestion: burning
Error: approching Suggestion: approaching
Sentence: The lectlure refuts the idea by mentioning that the flaming arrows weapon is less efective than burning mirror because romans were familiar with how to deal with them.
Error: romans Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: refuts Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: efective Suggestion: effective
Error: lectlure Suggestion: lecture
Sentence: In contrast, since they can't see the light waves from the new weapon device, they are not familiar with how to deal with maject fire that catch up in their ships suddenly.
Error: maject Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 20 2
Double check spelling errors.
No. of Words: 359 250
Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Number of Paragraphs: 5 4
better to have 4 paragraphs:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
----------------------
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 20 2
No. of Sentences: 15 12
No. of Words: 359 250
No. of Characters: 1727 1200
No. of Different Words: 170 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.353 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.811 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.255 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.933 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.602 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.361 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.595 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 4