tpo 33 integrated task
The reading and the lecture give information about the Carved stone balls. While the reading suggests some theorties behind the purpose or the meaning of those stone balls, the lecture refutes all the theories and the hypotheses provided by the reading passage
First, the lecture mentions that weapons show sighn of use and weares when it use for hunting or fighting. In contrast to the reading, the Carved stone balls have no sighns of craks or loese parts that can support that they were used as a weapons.
Second, in contrary to the belife in the reading that the stones were used as a primitive system for weight and measures, the lecture says that the stone massive size can not support the theory that suggests the stones were used as part of primitive system for weights and measures. Each stone has a different density, material composition. Therefore each one has a different weight. Thus, they can not be use as a measuring wieght.
Finally, the preofesser emphasizes that it is unlikely that the stone are served as a social purposes. He explain that the marks on the stone are simple and can not represent important statues of their owners. In addition, opposet to the British buried tradation during the Neolithic period, non of the stones marked with tune or graves that indicated the owners social statues or name. Therefore, they are not represent social statues of practical or unilitarian one. Thus, this was another point where the lecture opposes the suggestion in the reading passage.
Overall, it seems that the lecture showed that there are discrepancies in the points illustrated in the reading material.
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Sentence: First, the lecture mentions that weapons show sighn of use and weares when it use for hunting or fighting.
Description: The fragment it use for is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace use with verb, past tense
used as a weapons.
used as weapons.
used as a weapon.
the stone are served as a social purposes
the stones are served as a social purposes
they are not represent social statues
they do not represent social statues
Sentence: He explain that the marks on the stone are simple and can not represent important statues of their owners.
Description: The fragment He explain that is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace explain with verb, past tense
Sentence: While the reading suggests some theorties behind the purpose or the meaning of those stone balls, the lecture refutes all the theories and the hypotheses provided by the reading passage
Error: theorties Suggestion: theories
Sentence: First, the lecture mentions that weapons show sighn of use and weares when it use for hunting or fighting.
Error: weares Suggestion: wears
Error: sighn Suggestion: sign
Sentence: In contrast to the reading, the Carved stone balls have no sighns of craks or loese parts that can support that they were used as a weapons.
Error: craks Suggestion: cracks
Error: sighns Suggestion: signs
Error: loese Suggestion: lose
Sentence: Second, in contrary to the belife in the reading that the stones were used as a primitive system for weight and measures, the lecture says that the stone massive size can not support the theory that suggests the stones were used as part of primitive system for weights and measures.
Error: belife Suggestion: belief
Sentence: Thus, they can not be use as a measuring wieght.
Error: wieght Suggestion: weight
Sentence: Finally, the preofesser emphasizes that it is unlikely that the stone are served as a social purposes.
Error: preofesser Suggestion: professor
Sentence: In addition, opposet to the British buried tradation during the Neolithic period, non of the stones marked with tune or graves that indicated the owners social statues or name.
Error: tradation Suggestion: tradition
Error: opposet Suggestion: opposed
Sentence: Therefore, they are not represent social statues of practical or unilitarian one.
Error: unilitarian Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
better to have 4 paragraphs:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
No. of Sentences: 14 12
No. of Words: 274 250
No. of Characters: 1327 1200
No. of Different Words: 136 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.069 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.843 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.398 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 39 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.571 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.037 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.359 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.613 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.167 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 4