TPO 40 integrated writing
The reading and the lecture both are discussing permanent residence on Venus. The reading finds this idea impossible due to three reasons. Nonetheless, the lecture proposes a solution to all the mentioned drawbacks. The professor believes establishing a floating station fifty kilometers above the ground will be useful for this purpose. He then refutes the author's points using this proposal.
First, the reading states no human or human-made equipment cannot tolerate Venus' surface pressure. However, the professor opposes this point by mentioning that fifty kilometers above the surface of venus presses as much pressure as the earth's surface does, and people are used to it. So, the first problem proposed by the author is overturned.
Second, the reading avers that Venus' surface and atmosphere suffer from lack of oxygen and water. Then he states in order for people to satisfy these basic necessities, they have to import those substances from the earth, which is impractical. On the contrary, the professor explains that using the carbon dioxide and sulfuric acid in Venus' ecosystem, humans can make minerals like oxygen and water, since both of the mentioned substances contain hydrogen and oxygen with which water and oxygen necessary for breathing can be fabricated. Hence, the second point of the author is debuted.
Third, the reading mentions the lack of sunlight in Venus as another unpleasant characteristic. But the professor contends by stating that by building a floating station, they can pass the thick atmosphere of Venus, and the solar plates can get a decent amount of sunlight. In fact, they get sunlight both from the sun itself and reflected rays from underneath, thick clouds above which lies the station. This way, the third point of the author is not valid, as well.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 151, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...es in order for people to satisfy these basic necessities, they have to import those substances f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, nonetheless, second, so, then, third, well, in fact, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1522.0 1373.03311258 111% => OK
No of words: 290.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24827586207 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61160858581 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 145.348785872 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558620689655 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 419.366225166 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 62.3065756963 49.2860985944 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.125 110.228320801 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.125 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 7.06452816374 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290122549933 0.272083759551 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.089779234009 0.0996497079465 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0609633357062 0.0662205650399 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178406710174 0.162205337803 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0494697013714 0.0443174109184 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.3589403974 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 12.2367328918 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 63.6247240618 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.