TPO 60 Integrated
The main idea of both passage and the lecture is mainly about how commonly poachers hunt Rhinos horns illegally for sale them for expensive prices. With this in mind, the author mentions that there are several ideas have been suggested to help save them, three of which he provides to support his idea. The lecture, on the contrary, categorically refutes all three evidence and states that even it's necessary to do something about this problem, the mentioned suggestions are not wake enough to be useful.
First, both reading and the listening discuss the idea of preparing this kind animals by dehorning them to live free in the wild districts. In this line of thought, the author states that, by removing the horns, the poachers lose their attention to the rhinos. Horns can be remove without hurting the animal by using medical equipment and drugs. Conversely, the lecturer explains that this method is neighter practical, nor good for the human survival. Finding rehinos, preaporing them and removing their horns is both expensive and time taking and also reduces the chance of the animal to survive. Rhinos use their horns to dig water, find food, guide and protect their young , etc, which will be lost by removing horns. Accordingly, this advantages is more than the points for the animal.
Second, both text and talk put forth the idea of educating consumers about the wrong belives of health advantages from the Rhino horns. In this line of thought, the author maintains that the keratin Benefid produced by using horns is not scientific reality and by awaring people of the fact, the animal can be protected more. However, the lecturer points out that its is a cultural, ancient belive among people and a long lasting belief will not be rejected easily. This means, changing peoples mind will not also be helpful surviving the Rhinos.
Third, the passage and the lecture materials talk about how legalizing sale of horns by government. In this regard, the passage states that annually, the government receives many of the horns seized form the poachers. By legalizing them, the prices reduce and the animals survive when the hunters don't attract to kill them for taking horns. The lecturer, on the other hand, points out that taking this results is not predictable. Making the sale of horns legal means making this method acceptable and number of consumers and shops of horns will grow dramatically. pochers will not only stop but also hunt more to add to their income more. Accordingely, this ,method is not helpful either.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 676, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...find food, guide and protect their young , etc, which will be lost by removing hor...
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Line 3, column 96, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing consumers about the wrong belives of health advantages from the Rhino horns. ...
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Line 4, column 297, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...nd the animals survive when the hunters dont attract to kill them for taking horns. ...
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Line 4, column 564, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Pochers
... shops of horns will grow dramatically. pochers will not only stop but also hunt more t...
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Line 4, column 657, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...to their income more. Accordingely, this ,method is not helpful either.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, conversely, first, however, if, second, so, third, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 7.30242825607 233% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 22.412803532 152% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 30.3222958057 165% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 1373.03311258 154% => OK
No of words: 425.0 270.72406181 157% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96941176471 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.04702891845 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40043417792 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 145.348785872 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52 0.540411800872 96% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 419.366225166 152% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.23620309051 182% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 2.5761589404 311% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0662251656 161% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4449861013 49.2860985944 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.571428571 110.228320801 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2380952381 21.698381199 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.19047619048 7.06452816374 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 4.33554083885 277% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 63.6247240618 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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