TPO25 integrated writing
<p class="MsoNormal"> The article discuses about an ancient archeology finding in Iraq in 1938 and it claims that this clay jar has not been used as an electricity generating machine and provide three reasons for that. On the other hand, the lecturer explains that there are soloistic reasons that this jar was used as a small battery and refutes each reason of the essay.<o:p></o:p></p><p class="MsoNormal"> First, the article states that if this clay jar with copper cylinder and iron rod was used for producing electricity, there should be some wire or other equipment needed to transfer electricity. However, the professor refutes this statement by explaining that this discovery had done by ordinary people who they had not trained to care about this valuable archeologic finding. there is high
probability that they may found other accessory close to the jar but they throw away them cause they were not aware of the importance of them. <o:p></o:p></p><p class="MsoNormal"> Second, the article claims that this clay jar is so similar with another finding near this site which it is proved that that was used to hold the sacred text only. In contrast, the professor avers that this similarity does not prove anything. She states that there is some evidence in ancient world that they know about how they can produce electricity by iron and clay which it is the basic form of
other progress to make batteries. <o:p></o:p></p><p class="MsoNormal"> Third, the lecture states that ancient people could not do anything with electricity and it would be useless if they could produce that. The professor opposes that by saying this, they may be used this clay jar and copper cylinder to produce a weak electrical current to use for showing magic power or healing some pain as the modern medicine is using.</p>
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 32, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The article discuses about an ancient ar...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...class='MsoNormal'> First, the article states that if this c...
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Line 3, column 824, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...bout this valuable archeologic finding. there is high probability that they may fou...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Probability
...le archeologic finding. there is high probability that they may found other accessory clo...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Other
...nd clay which it is the basic form of other progress to make batteries.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, third, in contrast, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 22.412803532 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1589.0 1373.03311258 116% => OK
No of words: 298.0 270.72406181 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3322147651 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.49862722982 2.5805825403 174% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530201342282 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 419.366225166 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 21.2450331126 155% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.5052186902 49.2860985944 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 176.555555556 110.228320801 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.1111111111 21.698381199 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.77777777778 7.06452816374 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273578398668 0.272083759551 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124218415728 0.0996497079465 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610434132977 0.0662205650399 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207580172982 0.162205337803 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00643633337277 0.0443174109184 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.2 13.3589403974 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 53.8541721854 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.0289183223 147% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.23 12.2367328918 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.7273730684 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.498013245 145% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.2008830022 170% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
Read sample essays from ETS:
http://www.testbig.com/users/toeflwritingmaster
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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