TPO27-TPO 27 integrated writing Little ice age
In this set of material, the reading passage claims that a little ice age occurred from 1350 until 1990, and there were harsh winters with advent of large glaciers and then the reading passage brings up three reasons for creating this little ice age, however the lecture finds all these reasons obsolete and provides some evidence to advocate that these ideas are not convincing, in fact the information the professor provides contradicts the fact outlined in the reading passage.
First, the reading passage states a disruptive of Gulf Stream caused to develop such an ice age. Before this ice age, the weather was warm strangely and due to melting glaciers, a huge massive freshwater entered to Gulf stream that it could have affected on Earth's climate, in contrast the lecture argues that such a disruptive could have just affected on America, however this ice age occurred in other hemisphere like New Zealand or the parts of Africa.
Second, the author of reading declares that since some volcanic eruption took place in those years, it might have occurred a large volcanic eruption, and then a dark clouds of dust may have distributed in these regions and it would have blocked sunlight from reaching to Earth’s surface, conversely the professor believes that if there was such a huge eruption, it must have been reported by people, however since there is not a strong report about this eruption, consequently it is not a potent reason for this ice age.
Third, the reading contends that because of being lower of growing human population, human activities had decreased and there was not any deforestation, so all of Carbon dioxide was being attracted by trees and as we all know, the weather is cooler without greenhouse gases, on the contrast the professor says that there was not enough time for this reason, because human population increased after a very short time and deforestation started again, so this reason is not as strong as other mentioned reasons.
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from 1350 until 1990
from 1350 to 1990
with advent of large glaciers
with the advent of large glaciers
some volcanic eruption took place in those years
some volcanic eruptions took place in those years
and there was not any deforestation
and there was no any deforestation
flaws:
No. of Words: 330 250 //Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%) , more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 12
No. of Words: 330 250
No. of Characters: 1611 1200
No. of Different Words: 168 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.262 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.882 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.442 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 47.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 34.852 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.429 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.601 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.143 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'consequently', 'conversely', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'third', 'in contrast', 'in fact']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.265193370166 0.261695866417 101% => OK
Verbs: 0.160220994475 0.158904122519 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0745856353591 0.0723426182421 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0497237569061 0.0435111971325 114% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0165745856354 0.0277247811725 60% => OK
Prepositions: 0.135359116022 0.128828473217 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0497237569061 0.0370669169778 134% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.53272611252 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0138121546961 0.0208969081088 66% => OK
Particles: 0.00276243093923 0.00154638098197 179% => OK
Determiners: 0.124309392265 0.128158765124 97% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0165745856354 0.0158828679856 104% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00276243093923 0.0114777025283 24% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1981.0 1645.83664459 120% => OK
No of words: 330.0 271.125827815 122% => OK
Chars per words: 6.00303030303 6.08160592843 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.04852973271 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.372727272727 0.374372842146 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.287878787879 0.287516216867 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.178787878788 0.187439937562 95% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0909090909091 0.113142543107 80% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53272611252 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 145.348785872 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.539623497131 99% => OK
Word variations: 56.3480901156 53.8517498576 105% => OK
How many sentences: 5.0 13.0529801325 38% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 66.0 21.7502111507 303% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 160.216104059 49.3711431718 325% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 396.2 132.220823453 300% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 66.0 21.7502111507 303% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.6 0.878197800319 296% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.39072847682 0% => OK
Readability: 94.7878787879 50.5018328374 188% => OK
Elegance: 1.98780487805 1.90840788429 104% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.622899327749 0.549887131256 113% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.229428883542 0.142949733639 160% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0235995756451 0.0787303798458 30% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.89409786304 0.631733273073 142% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.175155210721 0.139662658121 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.381819034316 0.266732575781 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065077927091 0.103435571967 63% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.284348930941 0.414875509568 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0602625106863 0.0530846634433 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.412498168202 0.40443939384 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657821370713 0.0528353158467 125% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.26048565121 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 1.0 3.49668874172 29% => More positive topic words wanted.
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.62251655629 110% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 3.1766004415 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 5.0 10.2958057395 49% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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