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In this set of materials, the reading states that there are many doubt about creating discovery structure by bees in 200 million years ago and brings three different hypotheses to support. However, the lecture finds all the ideas not convincing and believes it is perfectly possible for bees to exist in 200 million years ago and provides some evidence to refute them all.
First of all, the author of reading claims that there are no bee's fossil from 200 million years ago and the oldest one is about 100 years ago. In contrast, the lecture argues that it is true that we do not have fossil from that date but maybe there were not any good condition for preserving the fossils on that time. Producing liquid by tree which is resin bring good condition for bee's fossil to preseve and no bee's fossils means no trees that produce that resin and it is not mean no bees on that time.
Furthermore, it is mentioned in the reading passage that flowering plants do not exist on that time so we cannot had bee 200 million years ago. On the contrary, the lecture contends that it is possible for bees on that time to feed on pre-flowering plant such as pine tree and there was adaptation for them to feed on them.
Finally, the author is of the opinion that the lack of some details of bee's nest is the good reason to say this fossile are not belong to bees. Conversely, the lecture explains that there are chemical evidences that show this fossils had same details with today's nest. In fact, in one experiment proved that chamber fossils have water proofing materials same as todays materials.
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Essay evaluation report
there are many doubt
there are many doubts
there was adaptation for them to feed on them
there was an adaptation for them to feed on them //'them' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
this fossile are not belong to bees
this fossile does not belong to bees
Definitions of belong
verb
(of a thing) be rightly placed in a specified position.
learning to place the blame where it belongs
(of a person) fit in a specified place or environment.
she is a stranger, and doesn't belong here
synonyms: fit in, be suited to, have a rightful place, have a home, go, click
be the property of.
the vehicle did not belong to him
synonyms: be owned by, be the property of, be the possession of, be held by, be in the hands of
Sentence: Conversely, the lecture explains that there are chemical evidences that show this fossils had same details with today's nest.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to this and fossils
Sentence: Producing liquid by tree which is resin bring good condition for bee's fossil to preseve and no bee's fossils means no trees that produce that resin and it is not mean no bees on that time.
Error: preseve Suggestion: preserve
Sentence: Finally, the author is of the opinion that the lack of some details of bee's nest is the good reason to say this fossile are not belong to bees.
Error: fossile Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 10 12
No. of Words: 285 250
No. of Characters: 1284 1200
No. of Different Words: 132 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.109 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.505 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.23 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 78 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 60 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 33 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.954 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.415 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.671 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.211 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 61, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun doubt seems to be countable; consider using: 'many doubts'.
Suggestion: many doubts
...ials, the reading states that there are many doubt about creating discovery structure by b...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 301, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... is perfectly possible for bees to exist in 200 million years ago and provides so...
^^
Line 3, column 62, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'bees'' or 'bee's'?
Suggestion: bees'; bee's
...hor of reading claims that there are no bees fossil from 200 million years ago and t...
^^^^
Line 7, column 129, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'belonged'.
Suggestion: belonged
...good reason to say this fossile are not belong to bees. Conversely, the lecture explai...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 222, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... there are chemical evidences that show this fossils had same details with todays ne...
^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'conversely', 'finally', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'as to', 'in contrast', 'in fact', 'such as', 'first of all', 'it is true', 'on the contrary']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.222950819672 0.261695866417 85% => OK
Verbs: 0.170491803279 0.158904122519 107% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0754098360656 0.0723426182421 104% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0622950819672 0.0435111971325 143% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0327868852459 0.0277247811725 118% => OK
Prepositions: 0.147540983607 0.128828473217 115% => OK
Participles: 0.0295081967213 0.0370669169778 80% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.28220193576 2.5805825403 88% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0262295081967 0.0208969081088 126% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.104918032787 0.128158765124 82% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00327868852459 0.0158828679856 21% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00655737704918 0.0114777025283 57% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1592.0 1645.83664459 97% => OK
No of words: 285.0 271.125827815 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58596491228 6.08160592843 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.04852973271 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.273684210526 0.374372842146 73% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.20701754386 0.287516216867 72% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.126315789474 0.187439937562 67% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.080701754386 0.113142543107 71% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28220193576 2.5805825403 88% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 145.348785872 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480701754386 0.539623497131 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 46.3869814328 53.8517498576 86% => OK
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0529801325 77% => OK
Sentence length: 28.5 21.7502111507 131% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.9748030577 49.3711431718 55% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.2 132.220823453 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 21.7502111507 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.6 0.878197800319 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.39072847682 147% => OK
Readability: 49.201754386 50.5018328374 97% => OK
Elegance: 1.50617283951 1.90840788429 79% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.440966449573 0.549887131256 80% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.199843032433 0.142949733639 140% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0500201229406 0.0787303798458 64% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.66554449412 0.631733273073 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.109877629798 0.139662658121 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.229074095304 0.266732575781 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107123745918 0.103435571967 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.3662650697 0.414875509568 88% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0862494655102 0.0530846634433 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.327880194741 0.40443939384 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353676033418 0.0528353158467 67% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.26048565121 94% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 3.49668874172 86% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.62251655629 83% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 3.1766004415 126% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 10.2958057395 97% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.