TPO46
The author of the reading passage and the lecturor discuss whether the advantages of keeping medical information in electronic databases outweigh storing in paper-based record. The author expresses that electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping. However, the lecturor casts doubts on these advantages and refutes each of the benefits the author provided by offering several counter-arguments.
Firstly, the author claims that using the electronic records can help reduce the costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records. Nevertheless, the lecturor indicates that there is not any connection between saving money and the use of electronic records. For the reason that doctors still keeps the paper records, instead of throwing away everytime they finish diagnosing. So, they still have to pay for the storage. Therefore, the lecturor believes that the use of electronic records does not benefit the cost of hospitals because they still need to pay for the storage.
Secondly, the author mentions that electronic medical records can reduce the chances of medical errors. Nonetheless, the lecturor states that most doctors, also including those who adopted to the electronic record system, still use pen and paper to record patients' circumstances and prescription. It is usually the staff who then type those information into the electronic databases. Thus, the lecturor concludes that this cannot prevent medical errors since all doctors use pen to write down the information.
Finally, the author points out that electronic records can aid medical research in a significant way by gathering large amounts of data from patients records. On the contrary, the lecturor claims that the access of the patients' records are subject to privacy laws. Researchers have to follow the strict rules, and the permission of the records have to be approved by the patients. As a result, the lecturor stands that the electronic databases cannot help the medical research as they have to follow the privacy laws.
- TPO 31 3
- TPO 31 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past. 73
- TPO46 73
- Universities should require every graduation student to take public speaking courses. 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 256, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ystem, still use pen and paper to record patients circumstances and prescription....
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Line 5, column 337, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'those informations'?
Suggestion: this information; those informations
.... It is usually the staff who then type those information into the electronic databases. Thus, th...
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Line 7, column 81, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a significant way" with adverb for "significant"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...tronic records can aid medical research in a significant way by gathering large amounts of data from...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, thus, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1752.0 1373.03311258 128% => OK
No of words: 318.0 270.72406181 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50943396226 5.08290768461 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81909776538 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 145.348785872 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48427672956 0.540411800872 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 540.0 419.366225166 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.9100965875 49.2860985944 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.5 110.228320801 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.875 21.698381199 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4375 7.06452816374 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.564246227525 0.272083759551 207% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.203202431664 0.0996497079465 204% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131632876543 0.0662205650399 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.3574049588 0.162205337803 220% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0559276362194 0.0443174109184 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.3589403974 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 53.8541721854 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.2367328918 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 63.6247240618 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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