TPO50
In the reading passage, the author describes three possible problems associated with mars missions. In the article, it is stated that due to the several constraints in a project of sending humans to mars is almost impossible. however, the lecturer is of the opinion that the mars mission is possible. he presented three possible solutions to the problems mentioned in the passage.
First of all, the author argues that there will be problems with food, water, and oxygen in the spacecraft as it takes 2 years to round the trip. however, the lecturer provided a possible solution to this problem. he says that hydroponic technology can be used in the spacecraft. since it doesn't require soil to grow plants, so it will provide food for astronauts. Similarly, the water use in hydroponic can be recycled and used for drinking purpose. Furthermore, the oxygen released by the growing plants can be used for respiration purposes by an astronaut.
Secondly, the writer further mentions that astronauts have to spend a long period of time in space having zero gravity, which may result in a decrease in muscle and lower bone density, so it is quite difficult for an astronaut to live in space for a long period of time. The speaker points out possible solutions to this problem as well. astronauts were moving to the Moon and other satellites for time to time, so they are accustomed to zero gravity. Moreover, exercise can be done to prevent a decrease in muscle and calcium and vitamins can be consumed to maintain bone density.
Finally, the writer says that there will be a problem with harmful radiation. he points out that there are so many harmful radiations in the space which cause serious harm to an astronaut. The writer proposes an alternative to solve this problem. he mentions that a small shield can be built. since harmful radiations are released occasionally, astronauts can stay inside the shield chamber during the emission of harmful radiation and in the rest of time, they can do their own work. Hence, he believes that the project of mars missions is possible.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...ng humans to mars is almost impossible. however, the lecturer is of the opinion that th...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...nion that the mars mission is possible. he presented three possible solutions to t...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
... as it takes 2 years to round the trip. however, the lecturer provided a possible solut...
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Suggestion: He
...ed a possible solution to this problem. he says that hydroponic technology can be ...
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Suggestion: Since
...chnology can be used in the spacecraft. since it doesnt require soil to grow plants, ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...can be used in the spacecraft. since it doesnt require soil to grow plants, so it will...
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ns that astronauts have to spend a long period of time in space having zero gravity, which may...
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...n astronaut to live in space for a long period of time. The speaker points out possible soluti...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Astronauts
...ble solutions to this problem as well. astronauts were moving to the Moon and other satel...
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Line 3, column 395, Rule ID: FOR_TIME_TO_TIME[1]
Message: Non-standard phrase. Did you mean 'from time to time'?
Suggestion: from time to time
...moving to the Moon and other satellites for time to time, so they are accustomed to zero gravity...
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Line 3, column 425, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[4]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'accustomed to zeroing'.
Suggestion: accustomed to zeroing
...atellites for time to time, so they are accustomed to zero gravity. Moreover, exercise can be done...
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Suggestion: He
...ll be a problem with harmful radiation. he points out that there are so many harmf...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...s an alternative to solve this problem. he mentions that a small shield can be bui...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Since
...tions that a small shield can be built. since harmful radiations are released occasio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, similarly, so, well, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 30.3222958057 165% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1729.0 1373.03311258 126% => OK
No of words: 353.0 270.72406181 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89801699717 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67106814675 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 145.348785872 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487252124646 0.540411800872 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 538.2 419.366225166 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.2621692869 49.2860985944 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.45 110.228320801 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.65 21.698381199 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 7.06452816374 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 4.19205298013 334% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.3589403974 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 12.2367328918 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 63.6247240618 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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