TPO64 Integrated Writing:
Reading Passage:
Broccoli is a vegetable that is popular throughout the United States, but it can be grown only in temperate climates with mild summers. Because of this limitation, 90 percent of the broccoli consumed in the United States is grown in the cooler regions of California, on the West Coast. It must be shipped 4:000 kilometers across the entire country to reach the populous East Coast
This situation may soon change, however: scientists are attempting to create a new type of broccoli that can be grown on the East Coast despite the hotter summers there. This project has several potential benefits.
First, growing broccoli on the East Coast and distributing it to nearby grocery stores would lower broccoli costs for consumers Transporting the vegetable from California by truck takes several days, which makes transportation costs high. Growing broccoli locally would reduce transportation costs, so stores could sell broccoli for less money.
Second; the new type of broccoli will probably be much more desirable to consumers than some other new crops. The new broccoli is being created using traditional breeding techniques: researchers are crossbreeding broccoli with other similar plants that have desirable characteristics, such as resistance to hot summers Other new crops—varieties of squash or maize, for example—were created using genetic modification technology. Genetically modified crops are very controversial: many consumers believe they are unsafe and so reject them. However, the new broccoli will not be in that category.
Third, vegetables are healthiest to eat right after they are harvested because they retain most of their beneficial nutrients and vitamins. The longer it takes for a vegetable like broccoli to reach consumers, the fewer nutrients and vitamins it contains. Broccoli that is grown locally can be eaten much sooner after it is cut, which will make this new broccoli healthier for East Coast residents than California broccoli.
Listening:
East Coast Broccoli might not actually be successful or beneficial as its creators claim.
First, it’s true that growing and selling crops locally saves money on transportation costs, but that will not necessarily make the new broccoli cheaper for consumers. Yes, the new breed of broccoli will be able to survive the hot summers on the East Coast, but unfortunately, it will also have lower yields than the broccoli grown on the Western Coast. This means that farmers on the East Coast will harvest less broccoli per hectare, and so they’ll have to sell their produce at a higher price. This price increase will cancel out the savings on transportation. So the East Coast consumers will probably not save any money buying the locally grown broccoli.
Second, even the researchers are using traditional breeding technics in creating the new broccoli, the public might still be suspicious. You see, financial support for this research comes from the same companies that created genetically modified crops in the past. Because those companies used genetic modification techniques with other crops, many American consumers distrust those companies and might distrust any project that those companies are involved in. These might lead the consumers to reject the new broccoli as well.
Third, it’s true that fresh broccoli has the greatest amount of health-promoting nutrients and vitamins, but is that a good argument for creating a new breed of broccoli that can be grown on the East Coast? Not necessarily. Other vegetables that already grow on East Coast contain similar nutrients that broccoli contains. For example, kale, a leafy green vegetable, provides comparable health benefits, and kale is in some respects better. It’s grown on the East not only during the summer but also during the fall and winter. Instead of wasting money and resources on creating new vegetables, we should educate people about eating fresh, healthy vegetables that are already available locally.
In the reading material, the author indicates that there are three advantage of creating new type of brocoli which can be grown on the east Coast. however, in the listening material, the lecture casts a doubt that that is not neccesaryly and those benefit also not convincing.
First, the author insists that broccoli which growing on the east cost can reduce the cos of consumers, because it will reduce the broccoli transportation fee. Nevertheless, the lecture argues that growing broccoli on the east cost even can reduce the transportation cost, but which doesn’t means that reduce the consumers costs. Science the broccoli growth in the heat area only can get little products. so it’s cost also in a high level.
Secondly, the author suggests that new broccoli can more desirable to consumers because it hasn’t generated by genetic methods. people are always incline to vegetables which have not using any genetic modification tools. In contrast, the lecture puts out a point that the new type broccolis are generated by the a company which also do many genetic crops such as maze, so people will not reliable this new broccoli has not use those technology. In result, people will not desire to buy it.
new Roman"; mso-bidi-theme-font:minor-bidi;mso-ansi-language:EN-US;mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN;mso-bidi-language:AR-SA">Thirdly, the author claims that the new type of broccoli can retain most of their nutrients and vitamins. however, the lecture argues that there are plenty of vegetables can also get those nutrients and vitamins such as one crop which can even growth in the winter and summer. so it is not neccesary to creating this type of broccoli.
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- TPO64 Integrated Writing Reading Passage Broccoli is a vegetable that is popular throughout the United States but it can be grown only in temperate climates with mild summers Because of this limitation 90 percent of the broccoli consumed in the United Sta 73
- TPO64 Integrated Writing Reading Passage Broccoli is a vegetable that is popular throughout the United States but it can be grown only in temperate climates with mild summers Because of this limitation 90 percent of the broccoli consumed in the United Sta 73
- TPO64 Integrated Writing Reading Passage Broccoli is a vegetable that is popular throughout the United States but it can be grown only in temperate climates with mild summers Because of this limitation 90 percent of the broccoli consumed in the United Sta 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1439.0 1373.03311258 105% => OK
No of words: 265.0 270.72406181 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43018867925 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 5.5920352249 2.5805825403 217% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 128.0 145.348785872 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483018867925 0.540411800872 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 432.9 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.1084182805 49.2860985944 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.692307692 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3846153846 21.698381199 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92307692308 7.06452816374 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 4.19205298013 310% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.445165290345 0.272083759551 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163286917215 0.0996497079465 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101874385271 0.0662205650399 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254411467435 0.162205337803 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0719295329787 0.0443174109184 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.3589403974 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.2367328918 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.42419426049 89% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 63.6247240618 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.