The passage says that educational TV is good for children but the professor disagrees.
The reading passage argues the benefits of educational television for children but the professor disagrees with this and makes several points that show the educational TV is not good for the children after all.
First of all, the reading says that it has been proven that watching some hours of educational TV every week can result in higher test scores for the childre. However, the professor states that countless amount of studies have show that all kind of tv are bad for the kids and in a particular case it have resulted in delayed speech development for children under the age of three.
Secondly, the reading introduces the educational TV as a great oportunity for the family bounding time stating that it will result in academic success and a better physical situation for the kid, but, the professor argues that the parents dose not always watch Tv with their child and even if they do that all of the time, this will not count as a effective family bonding time because there are not enough actual contact betwen them.
Finally, the reading states that all of the educational programs of the TV have a great overall quality due to some enforced government's regulation, However the professor cast on the executions of this rules stating that a research has shown that only one in eight of educational TV programs met those regulations.
To conclude, the reading says that educational TV are good tools for developing childrens abilities but the professor disagrees with it and provides reasons showing that the educational TV is actually bad for kids.
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and makes several points that show the educational TV is not good for the children after all.
and makes several points to show that the educational TV is not good for the children after all.
studies have show that
studies have shown that
it have resulted
it has resulted
the parents dose not always watch Tv
the parents do not always watch Tv
However the professor cast on the executions of this rules stating that
However the professor casts on the executions of this rule stating that
Sentence: First of all, the reading says that it has been proven that watching some hours of educational TV every week can result in higher test scores for the childre.
Error: childre Suggestion: children
Sentence: Secondly, the reading introduces the educational TV as a great oportunity for the family bounding time stating that it will result in academic success and a better physical situation for the kid, but, the professor argues that the parents dose not always watch Tv with their child and even if they do that all of the time, this will not count as a effective family bonding time because there are not enough actual contact betwen them.
Error: oportunity Suggestion: opportunity
Error: betwen Suggestion: between
Sentence: To conclude, the reading says that educational TV are good tools for developing childrens abilities but the professor disagrees with it and provides reasons showing that the educational TV is actually bad for kids.
Error: childrens Suggestion: children
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 18 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 6 12
No. of Words: 265 250
No. of Characters: 1279 1200
No. of Different Words: 135 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.035 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.826 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.59 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 71 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 44.167 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.963 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.565 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.909 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.202 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 4