The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

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The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The first diagram illustrated the process which cement produces. The process begin with mixing both of the material named stone lime and clay in the crusher which had two head to head gilded cylinder. The combination powder of out come mixing entered to mixer tube that connected to rotating heater cylinder. In the rotating heating cylinder, substance had been rotated and heated together. The last process of grinded substance to enactive last product we call cement are perfectly powdery before packaged to cement bag.

Cement as a common material to make concrete illustrated in second picture. Consist of 15% cement, 10% sand, 25% sand and half of gravel, all of them fed into a rotating concrete mixer machine where spinning until the concrete mix perfectly and ready to use.

To sum up, there are 5 steps to produce cement. Furthermore one step to make concrete from cement and another ingredients.

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Sentence: The process begin with mixing both of the material named stone lime and clay in the crusher which had two head to head gilded cylinder.
Description: The fragment process begin with is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace begin with verb, past participle

Sentence: The combination powder of out come mixing entered to mixer tube that connected to rotating heater cylinder.
Description: The word out is not usually used as an adverb
Suggestion: Refer to out

The last process of grinded substance to enactive last product we call cement are perfectly powdery before packaged to cement bag.
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Sentence: Furthermore one step to make concrete from cement and another ingredients.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to another and ingredients

Cement as a common material to make concrete illustrated in second picture.
Cement as a common material to make concrete is illustrated in the second picture.

Sentence: The last process of grinded substance to enactive last product we call cement are perfectly powdery before packaged to cement bag.
Error: grinded Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: enactive Suggestion: No alternate word

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