Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
A worthy quote says "Write down your future but make sure to use a pencil". Oftn people when receive the advice of following their dream and giving everything to achive it, they fail to notice the point that the what is that dream. How that dream will be pciked and whether that dream is appropos for them or not. All these questions never recive proper elucidation. I agree to the claim here which points out, more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals. But I disagree to the reason to some extent.
Following one's dream is definitely the cardinal rule of every human being. But it's paramount that before following the dream, one must choose a worthy dream for following. People get so engrossed to the fact that, they are following their dream, they forget to evaluate the very begining of their dream. A dream which is not fit for oneself, can never give the satisfaction of achieving it. For example, had the legendary batsman Don Bradman or Sachin Tendulkar, choosen a goal other than cricket, would the world have been able to experience their legendary. We would have missed the gem of cricket, had their goals be gone wrong. And people in early age, find it very difficult a choose a goal to follow. So considerable amount of effor must be placed on picking the goals as per one's passion, caliber and interest.
Now coming to the reason of the claim, which says, many people's dreams are inherently selfish. Though, the claim is true to some extent, but it's not completely true. Most of the times when one person chooses a goal, that decision is hugely inspired by his/her surroundings, family, upbringings, which might not be that great. And in turn, the person may end up choosing an easier dream rather than choosing as per his maximum achieving capacity. Sometimes people tend to underestimate or even overestimate themselves and end up choosing a not so great goal.
But in support of the reason, there are some instances, where the dreams choosen by some people are inherently selfish. Some times in the process of fulfilling the expectation of their parents, relatives, friends or family, people end up making their parents or family's dream as their own. But the end result sometime is catastrophic.
So, it's definite that every person must follow theor dream and must be restless till it's not achieved. But before that, conscious effor must be placed to choose a dream or goal of high morale value and which is inline.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 681, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...le in early age, find it very difficult a choose a goal to follow. So considerable amoun...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'for example']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.219917012448 0.240241500013 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.172199170124 0.157235817809 110% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0663900414938 0.0880659088768 75% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0497925311203 0.0497285424764 100% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0539419087137 0.0444667217837 121% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0850622406639 0.12292977631 69% => OK
Participles: 0.0601659751037 0.0406280797675 148% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.50943396226 2.79330140395 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0290456431535 0.030933414821 94% => OK
Particles: 0.00829875518672 0.0016655270985 498% => OK
Determiners: 0.0995850622407 0.0997080785238 100% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0248962655602 0.0249443105267 100% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0207468879668 0.0148568991511 140% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2465.0 2732.02544248 90% => OK
No of words: 424.0 452.878318584 94% => OK
Chars per words: 5.81367924528 6.0361032391 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.58838876751 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.337264150943 0.366273622748 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.207547169811 0.280924506359 74% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.146226415094 0.200843997647 73% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0943396226415 0.132149295362 71% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50943396226 2.79330140395 90% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 219.290929204 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528301886792 0.48968727796 108% => OK
Word variations: 60.3320995063 55.4138127331 109% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6194690265 116% => OK
Sentence length: 17.6666666667 23.380412469 76% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6460220626 59.4972553346 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.708333333 141.124799967 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 23.380412469 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.208333333333 0.674092028746 31% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.21349557522 19% => OK
Readability: 38.4213836478 51.4728631049 75% => OK
Elegance: 1.32330827068 1.64882698954 80% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270663205945 0.391690518653 69% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0948558849149 0.123202303941 77% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0821910038568 0.077325440228 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.465529037434 0.547984918172 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.143974371135 0.149214159877 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901124955276 0.161403998019 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804369178309 0.0892212321368 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.301063565606 0.385218514788 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.14475328869 0.0692045440612 209% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159298113555 0.275328986314 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0757668338192 0.0653680567796 116% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.4325221239 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.30420353982 132% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 7.22455752212 152% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.70907079646 37% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.5995575221 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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