The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
In the above statement, the author emphasizes cooperation, rather than competing with others, when youngsters prepare themselves for leadership in part of the government sector, industry, or other fields. However, in this essay, the author's statement will be refuted.
Admittingly, cooperation could be a way for the young people to be prepared for demonstrating their leadership when they are to join inside a government sector, industry, or other fields that requires leadership. Cooperating with others is an important value that is needed in a society. When cooperation is being held, compromising with others is to be followed. While compromising is on the go, communicating with others who have disparate opinions is a knack for the leaders to have. This virtue is what the society prefers when they are to be led by some representative. Therefore, when cooperation is done inside a community, after different ideas being compromised into one, better results for the society could be concluded.
However, in current days, competition is a better motive for the youngsters. Youngsters have lived in a fastly changing world. They are living in a survival of the fittest kind of society. There are full of intelligent young people to become a newbie in a government, industry, or other fields. Therefore, to make the most out of themselves, to present their latent ability, or potential, competition is a must in order to demonstrate their leadership.With the competition mind inside the young people, they are more motivated to show their leadership better than the others.
Moreover, cooperation does not able to propound the leader's strength itself. When cooperation is done, the community do not know to whom the development of the well-being of a certain society to be thankful to. Since through cooperation, which is composed of numerous member's ideas, it is not patent to what proportion the leaders have contributed. Therefore, in order to measure the leader's ability, the competition which presents one's strength, which is better than through cooperation,is a way to prepare our young people to demonstrate their leadership when they are to join in a society.
In summary, I personally believe that young people should be instilled with competition in order to lead the community more efficiently, and to be measured their ability well inside their society.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Youngsters have lived in a fastly changing world.
Error: fastly Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Words: 379 while No. of Different Words: 166 //it means it has a lot of duplicated content
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 379 350
No. of Characters: 1941 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.412 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.121 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.955 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 111 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.056 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.512 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.334 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.554 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.08 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 234, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...her fields. However, in this essay, the authors statement will be refuted. Admittin...
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Line 5, column 137, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed in a fastly changing world. They are living in a survival of the fittest kind...
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Line 5, column 455, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: With
...n order to demonstrate their leadership.With the competition mind inside the young p...
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Line 7, column 53, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'leaders'' or 'leader's'?
Suggestion: leaders'; leader's
...operation does not able to propound the leaders strength itself. When cooperation is do...
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Line 7, column 385, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'leaders'' or 'leader's'?
Suggestion: leaders'; leader's
...ted. Therefore, in order to measure the leaders ability, the competition which presents...
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Line 7, column 433, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ability, the competition which presents ones strength, which is better than through ...
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Line 7, column 488, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , is
...which is better than through cooperation,is a way to prepare our young people to de...
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Line 7, column 594, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hip when they are to join in a society. In summary, I personally believe that yo...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'well', 'while', 'in summary', 'kind of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.220930232558 0.240241500013 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.183720930233 0.157235817809 117% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0651162790698 0.0880659088768 74% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0441860465116 0.0497285424764 89% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0418604651163 0.0444667217837 94% => OK
Prepositions: 0.113953488372 0.12292977631 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0581395348837 0.0406280797675 143% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.12061271649 2.79330140395 112% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0488372093023 0.030933414821 158% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0953488372093 0.0997080785238 96% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0116279069767 0.0249443105267 47% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0372093023256 0.0148568991511 250% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2397.0 2732.02544248 88% => OK
No of words: 377.0 452.878318584 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.35809018568 6.0361032391 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.58838876751 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.397877984085 0.366273622748 109% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.315649867374 0.280924506359 112% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.236074270557 0.200843997647 118% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.177718832891 0.132149295362 134% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12061271649 2.79330140395 112% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 219.290929204 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474801061008 0.48968727796 97% => OK
Word variations: 50.15353786 55.4138127331 91% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6194690265 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.9444444444 23.380412469 90% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.6201748399 59.4972553346 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.166666667 141.124799967 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9444444444 23.380412469 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.611111111111 0.674092028746 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.21349557522 153% => OK
Readability: 52.5094311818 51.4728631049 102% => OK
Elegance: 1.45689655172 1.64882698954 88% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.494263429489 0.391690518653 126% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.157092920004 0.123202303941 128% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.07895523025 0.077325440228 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.585537995102 0.547984918172 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.180723948678 0.149214159877 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.20138056423 0.161403998019 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0914629584523 0.0892212321368 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.361029612484 0.385218514788 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0817898356291 0.0692045440612 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.331276239057 0.275328986314 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0750178784152 0.0653680567796 115% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.4325221239 105% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.30420353982 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88274336283 143% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 7.22455752212 138% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 3.66592920354 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.70907079646 185% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.5995575221 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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