Tpo19
In this set of material, both of the reading and the speaker discuss about the new approach of advertising that is called buzzing. In this method the advertisers employ some buzzers who promote products people they get familiar with them. The main goal this method is that people do not know buzzers do it intentionally in a mundane conversation. The reading provides three reasons that this way is not appropriate, however the speaker finds all reasons ridiculous. The information the lecture provides contradicts the fact outlined in the reading passage.
First of all, the reading claims that people do not like to hear incorrect information especially from people they believe them, in contrast the buzzer in lecture contends that the company of cell phone which he works for it, usually recruits person who has used with that product and he is satisfied. As a result they will not present inadequate information to costumers.
Moreover, the author of reading argues that since the buzzers pretend they are private individuals, people prefer to rely on them more than TV and radio and so on, consequently this procedure can strike to people, on the contrary the lecture refutes this statement. The buzzer expresses that people often ask a lot of questions about products and if they do not be convinced, they will not buy it.
The final point, presented in the reading is that buzzing approach can destroy social relationship among people. Since these buzzers act as hidden agendas, trust feeling will fed up from society, conversely the speaker is challenged this argument. He believes if the product is not in a good quality, the company does not employ buzzers, subsequently when people experience an ideal circumstance with company’s products, honest feeling will broaden in the society.
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Essay evaluation report
some buzzers who promote products people they get familiar with them.
some buzzers who promote products to people they are familiar with.
The main goal this method is that
The main goal of this method is that
especially from people they believe them,
especially from people they believe,
the company of cell phone which he works for it,
the company of cell phone which he works for, //'which' has refereed to 'it', so don't need 'it' again.
The buzzer expresses that people often ask a lot of questions about products and if they do not be convinced, they will not buy it.
Description: 'it' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2 //You have issues on pronouns.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 12
No. of Words: 294 250
No. of Characters: 1471 1200
No. of Different Words: 159 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.141 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.003 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.635 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.045 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.367 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.585 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.139 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 467, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e speaker finds all reasons ridiculous. The information the lecture provides contra...
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Line 3, column 303, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... with that product and he is satisfied. As a result they will not present inadequa...
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Line 7, column 176, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'feed'
Suggestion: feed
...t as hidden agendas, trust feeling will fed up from society, conversely the speaker...
^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'conversely', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'in contrast', 'as a result', 'first of all', 'on the contrary']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.254601226994 0.261695866417 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.165644171779 0.158904122519 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0552147239264 0.0723426182421 76% => OK
Adverbs: 0.058282208589 0.0435111971325 134% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0460122699387 0.0277247811725 166% => OK
Prepositions: 0.128834355828 0.128828473217 100% => OK
Participles: 0.0245398773006 0.0370669169778 66% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.76030415065 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0122699386503 0.0208969081088 59% => OK
Particles: 0.00306748466258 0.00154638098197 198% => OK
Determiners: 0.128834355828 0.128158765124 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0184049079755 0.0158828679856 116% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0184049079755 0.0114777025283 160% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1808.0 1645.83664459 110% => OK
No of words: 294.0 271.125827815 108% => OK
Chars per words: 6.14965986395 6.08160592843 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.04852973271 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.401360544218 0.374372842146 107% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.316326530612 0.287516216867 110% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.183673469388 0.187439937562 98% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.115646258503 0.113142543107 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76030415065 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56462585034 0.539623497131 105% => OK
Word variations: 59.3106371844 53.8517498576 110% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0529801325 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.5 21.7502111507 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.8367143175 49.3711431718 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.666666667 132.220823453 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 21.7502111507 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.916666666667 0.878197800319 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.39072847682 88% => OK
Readability: 56.1326530612 50.5018328374 111% => OK
Elegance: 1.51136363636 1.90840788429 79% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.58488414834 0.549887131256 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.122362901118 0.142949733639 86% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0523370392525 0.0787303798458 66% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.618359965695 0.631733273073 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.14977497323 0.139662658121 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.272753351106 0.266732575781 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.082721287071 0.103435571967 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.34967841977 0.414875509568 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0544736689166 0.0530846634433 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.424028621303 0.40443939384 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0551661527339 0.0528353158467 104% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.26048565121 47% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 3.49668874172 86% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.62251655629 138% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 3.1766004415 63% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 10.2958057395 97% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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