Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should have hobbies and do physical activities that are very different from their own work.
As a matter of fact, everybody wants to have some hobbies to be satisfied in his/her life. Some people believe that their job is the whole of their life and some people think otherwise, because they think that they do not have enough time to spend in these activities. In my view, I strongly believe that each person needs to have some different entertainments from his/her job. This point is important, because people want to live happy and healthy.
First and foremost, doing some new activities will help people to find new friends and expand their relationships. Consequently, new friends will create new opportunities for their friends to be happier or meet their future partner in the new groups. For instance, a guy who has many relations in work and gym and other social groups will have a huge chance to meet his favorite partner in these places.
In addition, undoubtedly, each person needs to be healthy in mind and body. As everybody knows, physical activities will help people to have some movements during a boring day and it will help them to be in a balance in their life. As an illustration, psychologists in Irvine University found out that there is a direct relation between doing exercise and being happy. These researchers published their essay in the psychological books three years before.
Last but not least, having some variety in the daily schedule is fun. Adults especially young adults do not like to do a same work for the entire day. Planning an accurate schedule will help them to have fun and be more satisfied during their working days without wasting time. Therefore, people will see some significant changes in their life. In another word, they will be surprisingly more energetic in their job position too, because they have an interesting plan for their life.
To sum up, having physical activities is not only helpful for human's health, but also has indirect effects on human's job. Although some people think that having variety of activities during a week is a kind of wasting time, some people have a perfect plan for their life and they will gain more benefits.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Need to extend the pool of vocabulary words. See here TOEFL Frequently Used Words:
http://www.testbig.com/voca/quiz/TOEFL
try to know all of them.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 362 350
No. of Characters: 1704 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.362 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.707 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.513 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.111 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.839 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.324 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.554 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, kind of, as a matter of fact, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1758.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88333333333 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58736244938 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502777777778 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.2108025625 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6666666667 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231730345585 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0809049976644 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448033202 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14406884306 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213887356948 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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