Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The recent survies indicate that there are enormous educated persons with no job positions all around the world, which made the governments worry. Students go to universites in order to obtain a secure, successful future. However, I believe that it is harder to identify what type of career would lead to a secure life because of following reasons.
First, I think that in the past the population was much more less. If the population is not too high, the educated persons are fewer. As a result, more job positions are available in the country. In contrast, nowadays, the job positions related to persons' education degrees are already filled. So, most of the young people would migrate to work in foreign countries.
In addition, recently, the governments had decided to alter the education system. Due to the new education policy, students must pass a wide variety of subjects to obtain their degrees. Hence, students lose lots of their time and learn some subjects completelly irrelevant to their future careers. Also, in the past, most of the companies provided some Intership courses before hirring someone. As a consequnce, students did not go to university, instead they were prepared directly for their careers.
Last but not the least, the expcetation of companies are nowadays so much high that it almost makes it impossible to get a job right after the university. In other sense, in the previous decades, aplicants only were required to have education degrees. On the conterary, thesedays, aplicants must have extended knowledge including the effective social interaction, the impressive Body-Language, a comprehensive resume and an efficient recommendation. Beside these factors, all aplicant must win the closely compettition markets.
To sum up, I am of the conviction that during the current dacade, it is so much more challenging to secure our future lives because the population are continueing to grow, the new education policy and extreme companies' expectations.
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Essay evaluation report
it is so much more challenging
it is much more challenging
Sentence: The recent survies indicate that there are enormous educated persons with no job positions all around the world, which made the governments worry.
Error: survies Suggestion: survives
Sentence: Students go to universites in order to obtain a secure, successful future.
Error: universites Suggestion: universities
Sentence: Hence, students lose lots of their time and learn some subjects completelly irrelevant to their future careers.
Error: completelly Suggestion: completely
Sentence: Also, in the past, most of the companies provided some Intership courses before hirring someone.
Error: hirring Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: As a consequnce, students did not go to university, instead they were prepared directly for their careers.
Error: consequnce Suggestion: consequence
Sentence: Last but not the least, the expcetation of companies are nowadays so much high that it almost makes it impossible to get a job right after the university.
Error: expcetation Suggestion: expectation
Sentence: In other sense, in the previous decades, aplicants only were required to have education degrees.
Error: aplicants Suggestion: applicants
Sentence: On the conterary, thesedays, aplicants must have extended knowledge including the effective social interaction, the impressive Body-Language, a comprehensive resume and an efficient recommendation.
Error: conterary Suggestion: contrary
Error: aplicants Suggestion: applicants
Error: thesedays Suggestion: theses
Sentence: Beside these factors, all aplicant must win the closely compettition markets.
Error: compettition Suggestion: competition
Error: aplicant Suggestion: applicant
Sentence: To sum up, I am of the conviction that during the current dacade, it is so much more challenging to secure our future lives because the population are continueing to grow, the new education policy and extreme companies' expectations.
Error: dacade Suggestion: decade
Error: continueing Suggestion: continuing
flaws:
No. of Spelling Errors: 14 2
Double check spelling errors.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 14 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 317 350
No. of Characters: 1616 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.22 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.098 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.811 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.611 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.135 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.285 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.53 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.046 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 57, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'less' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: less
...hat in the past the population was much more less. If the population is not too high, the...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 98, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'securing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: securing
... dacade, it is so much more challenging to secure our future lives because the population...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, so, i think, in addition, in contrast, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1678.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 317.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29337539432 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92293040912 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593059936909 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6380350904 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2222222222 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6111111111 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111462628299 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0350035447907 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557443393141 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0652649071041 0.150856017488 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0863639088241 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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