The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Society' roles rely not only in providing its leaders competitive skills within a growing economy, but to also teach them the importance of working with a team in order to be succesful in their endeavors.
The argument claims that the society is incumbent on preparing future leaders by installing in them cooperation rather than competition. While this statement may have some validity to it, it is important to look at the roles that leaders possess.
Providing the scenario of an import export company in the clothing industry trying to obtain a clothing deal, the CEO of such company would be required to have an efficient team to direct its calculated moves and to execute his orders, while in the same time, be competitive with other similar companies in the industry. As such, both skills; cooperation and competition are needed, but are used in different circumstances.
In addition, challenging a leader who feel threatened to lose his position, may in fact, stimulate his productivity. Tenure in the education system hinder professors who have no stimulus to improve their skills. This is the analogy of the dunkey and the carrot. It the dunkey already receveived his carrot, why would he try to move faster and please his rider? In the same way, a leader who is not persistently challenged and takes his position for granted will not seek to improve the logistic of a company. Only when flaws are identified, and a reason is given to do so, can a leader direct his energy toward ameliorating a situation.
As a matter of fact, even though one may have such desire, most of the time a competent team is needed. A leader may not have the time or the skills necessary to succeed alone. For example, if a technological developper aims to produce an application for iphone, while he may have the managing skills to convince investisor to subsidize the development, he may not have the skills to produce the application necessary. The developper and CEO of this company will require the tedious work of an extensive team to realize this accomplishment. Therefore, working hand in hand with a team is indispensable as well to be competitive.
While the argument has some validity, it is primordial to consider the role of a leader in an industry and how both competitive and cooperative skills are expected from a leader. Competition will insure a high quality product and services, while cooperation, will insure its realization.
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- Society' roles rely not only in providing its leaders competitive skills within a growing economy, but to also teach them the importance of working with a team in order to be succesful in their endeavors. The argument claims that the society is incumbent 33
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 16
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...der to be succesful in their endeavors. The argument claims that the society is ...
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Line 9, column 37, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... As a matter of fact, even though one may have such desire, most of the time a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in addition, in fact, as a matter of fact, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2041.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 410.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97804878049 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95108747941 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50487804878 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.6204020386 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.388888889 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7777777778 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94444444444 5.21951772744 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0985601386343 0.243740707755 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0285256817592 0.0831039109588 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0411468414335 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0564331678058 0.150359130593 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0289651915348 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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