One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.
Do you think the advantageous of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
The past hundred years brought about many advancement in all aspects of life, as such the medical field experienced a massive leap and with it people's longevity improved drastically thus increasing their numbers. However, not all people concur with all the merits of living longer on this earth, personally I am one of those people.
The field of medicine has been trying to improve the quality of life of the masses as far back as the medieval times. For example the Bubonic Plague, which almost wiped out all the population in Europe killing one in every three men at the time, culminated the rise of scientific medicine. Proper sanitation and waste disposal aided in halting the spread of the plague. As technology becomes more advanced in modern times and people are now experiencing better quality of life resulting to overpopulation. A main detriment of overpopulation is the depletion of resources. To begin with, as more people are living they require a more supplies of food and water, with more mouths to feed there will come a time that supplies will ran out and people will starve to death. Another disadvantage, more people connotes a rise of pollution in a certain area. Urban cities, where a huge number of people dwells, experience an increase of pollution in the air, water and even noise pollution. As a direct result of people growing older, more financial means are needed in order for them to still have a better quality of life. These funds could have more use for some other important uses, therefore neglecting other services such as education and safety for the general public.
In conclusion, as more and more people are living in this world due to the advancement of medical science, we will be faced with the ugly side of overpopulation and I am personally not warranting to further life longevity.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 38, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun advancement seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much advancement', 'a good deal of advancement'.
Suggestion: much advancement; a good deal of advancement
The past hundred years brought about many advancement in all aspects of life, as such the med...
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Line 4, column 729, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'run'
Suggestion: run
...ere will come a time that supplies will ran out and people will starve to death. An...
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Line 4, column 1254, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...es such as education and safety for the general public. In conclusion, as more and more peo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90675241158 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69428050594 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588424437299 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0969189187 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.384615385 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9230769231 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46153846154 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162335054153 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0565167794271 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472591904356 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131001474531 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0331392929881 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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