Most advertisement make products seems much better than they really are.
Some people think that advertising mislead the public. People think that advertising tempting to announce for low prices to gather to benefit harm the consumer. Although I understand their point of view, I have a different opinion. I believe that advertising benefits the public. It promotes heathy products and lifestyle. Also it helps us to chose between different goods.
Advertising helps people to have a healthy life. Most advertising companies published a lot of products to aware the customers bout the bad and the good products. For example, advertises for cigarettes and alcohol are extinct on the television nowadays. However, advertises about milk, cereal and yogurt are managed toward children to encourage children eat healthy food. Those kinds of advertises have an important role to promote our children to live a healthy life style, by eating healthy food and abolishing dangerous stuff from their life.
Advertising help us to chose between different goods. There are lot of products available in the market. Customers got lost and overwhelmed by all those products. Advertising helps customers to understand and differentiate between the good and the bad products. For instance, if we watch an advertise about computers, it will tell us what is the best features of the computer. How fast it works. If the advertise is for a laptop, it will shows you that it is easy to hold it and take it any where.
In conclusion, for the reason I mentioned above I believe that advertising has some beneficial effects. Although it some time may mislead the public, by making them overwhelming with many things. However, most good advertising benefit the public by keeping them aware to chose only the good products. Also, help the people to choose between the different kinds of products available in the market.
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- TPO-48 - Integrated Writing Task In recent years, many frog species around the world have declined in numbers or even gone extinct due to changes in their environment. These population declines and extinctions have serious consequences for the ecosystems 80
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1561.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 302.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16887417219 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87222024542 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506622516556 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 476.1 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.3985250312 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.3333333333 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.380952381 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2380952381 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154467275988 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0512386723234 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0337629227289 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103162341867 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0123828063934 0.0645574589148 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.11 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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