TPO-25 - Independent Writing Task
Nowadays, there are many tasks and roles that young people encounter them, and doing them play an important role in people's lives. As a matter of fact, they have a strong impact on every facet of our life that cannot be overlooked. In this regard, a provocative question which is raised is whether why the young people have not enough time to communicate with the society and help the other people. Nowadays, it has long been a question of great interest for researchers and people. Personally speaking, I agree with the statement. Considering the most common viewpoints nowadays, I will give the following reasons to explain why I agree.
The first and important reason is that they allocate the most of their time to unimportant activities. Needless to say that they are able to gain more time in that situation, and I think that they can make progress in the life by spending more time in communication. in a good way. Let me take you back a few years ago to when I was eighteen. In that time, I was a student and had a lot of works to do. I lived with my grandmother. She was blind and needed much attention. Unfortunately, due to I had so many courses, I had to spend more time at the university. When I came back to the home, I understood she had eaten the wrong drugs. One they, when I came back, I saw that he had fallen on the ground without any response. I realized that he had a heart attack and lost his life. After that I never forget it. This is not limited to the young people; I always have to encounter with to find enough time to communicate with my family.
Another reason that requires a special attention is that the young people have to face with the prominent problem. They want to marry, reach their dreams and be independent. For this purpose, they must work and save money. Let me take an example, when I was a young, I had to work as a secretary in an office as fulltime about 40 hours in a week. When I came back from the work, I preferred to rest. Therefore, I had not enough time to allocate to the other people.
To conclude, to wrap it up, in addition to aforementioned reasons, there are also many other reasons and examples that can be persuasive enough and lead us to the conclusion why I agree with the statement. To recapitulate the reasons, I agree not only because they have unimportant activities, but also because they are fascinating to be independent and save money to have better future. These led to they are not enough time to help the communication.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Nowadays, there are many tasks and roles...
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Line 3, column 268, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...y spending more time in communication. in a good way. Let me take you back a few ...
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Line 3, column 783, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e had a heart attack and lost his life. After that I never forget it. This is not lim...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, therefore, i think, in addition, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2045.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45533769063 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6669621207 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479302832244 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 659.7 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.757518908 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.0357142857 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3928571429 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0172962071609 0.236089414692 7% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00352303121465 0.076458572812 5% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0127148873681 0.0737576698707 17% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0131208399863 0.150856017488 9% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0132462110452 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 11.7677419355 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.29 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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