Do you agree or disagree?
Educating children become more difficult than before due to the new technology such as social networks, online games and cell phones
New technology brought about dramatic changes in our modern world, including business to education. In this regret, I have to admit I belive that technology such as cell phones and social networks not only make the process of educating to children much easier than before but also give a golden opportunity for teachers to teach children efficiently. I will elaborate my reasons in this essay and try to shed some light on my perspective through ample examples.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that new technology enable teachers to keep in touch with their students. For instance, students how could not attend to university could go online and see class's discussion live. My personal anecdote will well demonstrate this point of view. Last week when I was sick at hospital, my teacher gave me the opportunity to take virtual exam at hospital. He sent pdf version of questions to me and I had to send the ansewrs within the deadline. The story above clearly reveals the advantage of smart phone.
From another aspect, a number of experts belive that children could learn while playing online games. The story of my cousin could justify this stand point. He plays almost all days but he gets mark A in his courses, the reason behind his success is, he plays online games such as Challenge Mindes, these kind of games give an opportunity for gamers to ansewrs to questions which are directly related to the university's coures. To make a long story short, Challenge Minds games pave the path for studing while you are entertaining.
Taken all aspects mentioned above into consideration I pretty convinced that modern revolutions in technology such as cell phone and social media pave the path for educating children more efficiently. Meanwhile, a number of people belive that cell phones and online games are nothing but waste of time and money and children who dedicate considerable amount of time dealing with new technology do not have enough time to study and make teaching process most difficult ever than before.
- TPO 45 3
- Do you agree or disagree?Teachers in past have higher social values and people appreciated them even more than nowadays. 73
- TPO 46 78
- TPO 26: It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ jobs. 70
- 43: teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 300, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
... online games such as Challenge Mindes, these kind of games give an opportunity for gamers...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, well, while, for instance, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1700.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97076023392 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59459390138 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.581871345029 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.5754204369 48.9658058833 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.333333333 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272459258675 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717737170173 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0819612030704 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164230425754 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0995808077107 0.0645574589148 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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