Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The more money people have, the more they should give away to charity
Needless to say, in each society, there are some people obtaining more money than ordinary people. This brings up a highly controversial topic regarding the use of affluent subjects' income whether the wealthy people should donate their money to charity or not. I believe that the aforementioned individuals should devote their money to charity because poor people require money and also prosperous subjects do not spend money on serious topics, explained in the following paragraphs in great detail.
To begin with, the poor people need money. In other words, there are a lot of people around the world who have meager income or they may sometimes go to bed without eating food. If the individuals gaining a huge amount of money, contribute money for weak people, they will be financially rewarding. One example will suffice to illustrate my point. Last month, When I was talking with one of best friends, I saw a person who gave away his assets to poor people. This person donated money to people needing money for buying a house, getting married and so forth. I heard my friend that this person is an important person since he also helped to build educational centers such as schools for deprived children and young adults. His financial aids for my country is a very valuable task because his supports make it possible for some poor people to have a satisfactory life. Hence, prosperous subjects should dedicate their money and salary to charity, as the poor people require financial support.
The second point worth discussing is related to the use of money on trivial things. In fact, some wealthy subjects spend their monthly salary on unimportant things such as gambling, taking drugs and so on. Most of these practices are done by prosperous individuals for the sake of a craze, which I consider them a waste of money. One of my country's famous person provides an illuminating insight into this fact. When I was watching a news program, I heard about one of celebrity on news program. This famous person was arrested at the party because of taking drugs. I had not known any idea about this famous person before I saw him on the television news program. The correspondent stated that the same person also has been captured when he was gambling, as it is a crime in my country. Dedicating money to these things caused him to be arrested. Nevertheless, if he devoted his money to better places such as donating money to fund university students, it would be advantageous. Not only would not he get arrested by police for his drug-related offenses, but the college students would benefit from his donation. Consequently, affluent subjects should be allocated to charity because they do not spend money on the worthwhile activities.
In conclusion, according to above-mentioned factor, I contend that the more money people acquire, the more money they should give away due to the need of weak people and because of spending affluent people on trivial things.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1003, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gets'.
Suggestion: gets
... be advantageous. Not only would not he get arrested by police for his drug-related...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, if, may, nevertheless, regarding, second, so, while, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2466.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 500.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.932 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66638331828 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 772.2 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8676356487 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.64 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264243761599 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0735084694324 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0840704188725 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210530437772 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101727314325 0.0645574589148 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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