TPO 46- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no doubt that celebrities are valuable assets of a country and the number of their fans sometimes exceed from the people a given country to other parts of the world. One of the most contentious questions which are often raised regarding this issue is whether people who fallow their opinions are mostly the youth or the older ones. I strongly contend that most of the fans of the celebrities are among young people. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into three conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoint.
To commence, one of the reasons which come to mind is that young people always need to have a role model in their lives. Simply stated, celebrities usually play this role for them. Indeed, when young people choose one of these famous people as the model, they imitate every action and opinions of them and try to apply it in their lives. Rarely can be seen this following process between elders, with this in mind; they pass on the challenges and now they pave the way for the youth to use the opportunities. To shed more light on this issue, my brother is the die-hard fan of Cristian Ronaldo, as long as he wears the T-shirt with the name of him and imitates his hairstyle while these are nonsense for my father.
Alongside the first reason that elaborated above, second reason can be that young people intend to participate all programs of entertainments like cinema, theater, sports games and so forth. Broadly speaking, this makes a chance for them to be familiar with celebrities and know about themselves besides following them in social media as a strict fan. Logically speaking, older people are not interested in taking place some entertainments and as if they are, hardly are enthusiastic to imitate the celebrities acts and ideas. For instance, I saw a documentary about the Beatles group whose their fans were mostly the teenage girls and boys which were killing themselves for their concerts, obviously, these will be the persons who emulate their activities more than older people.
All in all, as I mentioned above, the most important part of the celebrity fans are the young people from all over the world. To recapitulate the reasons, because they require to have a person as a model besides due to their extent participating in the entertainment programs, their supporting manner of celebrities is undeniable. Alongside with this, now one of the questions which are a mystery to me is that why the older people are not fascinated to take part in these activities? I wonder what it is maybe due to the sense of aging and being frustrated from their likes.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, may, regarding, second, so, thus, while, broadly speaking, for instance, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2160.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81069042316 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63763121514 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501113585746 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.5725654835 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.058823529 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4117647059 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94117647059 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161948481984 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0545193187136 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0311631034991 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104325753315 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0194589347059 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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